唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add a brief explanation. For example, avoid phrases like "I have a bathroom singer at all" which is unclear. Use simple, correct sentences and express your feelings about singing.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Although I am not a professional singer and my voice is not very good, I enjoy singing by myself, especially when I am alone.

建議: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Begin with a direct answer, then provide specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid confusing phrases like "the situation was not in my court." Instead, explain clearly why you did not continue learning.

範例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. When I was a child, my mother tried to enroll me in a singing school, but I was unable to attend because of some family issues.

建議: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and grammatical mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words. For example, explain your feelings about singing for others and when you feel comfortable doing so.

範例: I usually don't sing for people because I feel a little shy. However, when I am very happy, I like to sing for my close friends or my boyfriend to share my joy.

建議: Improve your answer by using clearer sentences and linking words to connect ideas. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. Avoid vague phrases like "helps us to become."

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps us relax and express our emotions. For example, listening to different genres of music can improve our mood and reduce stress.

× My voice is not so well, you should understand, but I have a bathroom singer at all.

✓ My voice is not so good, you should understand, but I am a bathroom singer after all.

The word 'well' is an adverb and incorrectly used to describe 'voice', which requires an adjective 'good'. Also, 'I have a bathroom singer' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I am a bathroom singer'. The phrase 'at all' is better replaced with 'after all' to convey the intended meaning.

× Actually not, I have never learned how to sing but in my childhood I can remember my mom get me got me to a singing school or music school to learn me how to sing but unfortunately the situation was not in my court.

✓ Actually not, I have never learned how to sing but in my childhood I can remember my mom took me to a singing school or music school to teach me how to sing but unfortunately the situation was not in my favor.

The verbs 'get me got me' are incorrect past tense forms; the correct past tense verb is 'took me'. Also, 'to learn me' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to teach me'. The phrase 'not in my court' is an idiomatic error; the correct phrase is 'not in my favor'.

× Actually, as I am not a singer, I previously mentioned I'm not free to sing for anyone when I'm little bit shy to sing for anyone.

✓ Actually, as I am not a singer, I previously mentioned I'm not comfortable singing for anyone because I'm a little bit shy to sing for anyone.

The phrase 'I'm not free to sing' is incorrect; 'not comfortable singing' better expresses the intended meaning. Also, 'when I'm little bit shy' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'because I'm a little bit shy' to explain the reason.

× Yes, I think it's been happiness to people because when we sing or we listen any music, it helps us to become and it's a part of our relaxation.

✓ Yes, I think it brings happiness to people because when we sing or listen to any music, it helps us relax and it's a part of our relaxation.

The phrase 'it's been happiness to people' is incorrect; 'it brings happiness to people' is correct. The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before 'any music'. The phrase 'helps us to become' is incomplete and unclear; 'helps us relax' is appropriate here.

× There are different genres song.

✓ There are different genres of songs.

The phrase 'genres song' is incorrect because 'genres' is plural and should be followed by a plural noun 'songs' with the preposition 'of' to indicate the relationship.