唱歌— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
Do you like singing? Why?
考生
Well, I'm not a good singer, but, umm, usually I sing whenever there is a speaker. Uh, we, we put a song on the speaker, so or going on the long drive, then at that time I would like to sing with the song. But uh, anyways, I don't sing much.
考官
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
考生
Uh, no, I umm, never learnt uh, to sing because uh, that was never a subject in my, my school. But whenever we see the movies or the televisions, I always try to sing along with the song. So yes, I.
考官
Who do you want to sing for?
考生
I like to sing for my loved ones like my parents, my siblings and my friend and also for my boyfriend. So I like to sing a song for them. I'm so there are so many songs I have selected for them. Usually I sing whenever there is any occasion.
考官
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
考生
Yes, of course, singing always makes other people happy as you, they feel very special when you dedicated any song to them. And music or song always has such a vibe which which change the the we change the the environment of surroundings.
評估
總分
Part 1
Do you like singing? Why?
分數: 60.0建議: Try to make your answer more concise and clear by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.
範例: I enjoy singing occasionally, especially when I am on a long drive with music playing. Although I'm not a professional singer, singing along to songs makes the experience more enjoyable.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
分數: 55.0建議: Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear and complete answer with supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and be specific about your experience.
範例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing because it was not offered at my school. However, I often sing along to songs when watching movies or TV shows, which helps me enjoy the music.
Who do you want to sing for?
分數: 65.0建議: Make your answer more structured by starting with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of occasions or songs to enrich your response.
範例: I enjoy singing for my loved ones, such as my parents, siblings, friends, and boyfriend. For example, I often choose special songs to perform for them during family gatherings or celebrations.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
分數: 60.0建議: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.
範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because dedicating a song to someone makes them feel special. Moreover, music creates a positive atmosphere that can uplift the mood of everyone around.
文法
× usually I sing whenever there is a speaker
✓ usually I sing whenever there is a speaker playing music
The phrase 'there is a speaker' is incomplete and unclear. It should specify that the speaker is playing music to make sense in context. This corrects the 'There be issue' by clarifying the existence and function of the speaker.
× so or going on the long drive
✓ or going on a long drive
The phrase 'on the long drive' is incorrect because 'a long drive' is a general activity and should use the indefinite article 'a' instead of 'the'. Also, 'so or' is unclear and should be omitted or rephrased for clarity.
× my friend and also for my boyfriend
✓ my friends and also for my boyfriend
The singular 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match the plural 'my parents' and 'my siblings' mentioned earlier, ensuring consistency in pronoun use.
× when you dedicated any song to them
✓ when you dedicate any song to them
The verb 'dedicated' is in the past tense, which is incorrect here. The sentence requires the present tense 'dedicate' to match the present tense context, correcting the modal verb usage and verb tense.
× And music or song always has such a vibe which which change the the we change the the environment of surroundings
✓ And music or songs always have such a vibe which changes the environment around us
The original sentence has repetition and unclear structure. 'Music or song' should be pluralized to 'music or songs' to agree with the verb 'have'. The phrase 'which which change the the we change the the environment of surroundings' is redundant and confusing. It is corrected to 'which changes the environment around us' for clarity and grammatical correctness.
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