唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và câu hơi dài, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên chia câu thành các câu ngắn hơn, sử dụng từ nối hợp lý để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi nhỏ như "I it is" thành "it is".

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me feel relaxed and happy after a busy day. Also, raising my voice is a great way to reduce stress and express my emotions. Sometimes, I sing along with my friends or relatives, which helps us bond and strengthen our relationships.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt thì động từ và cấu trúc câu. Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi như "I'm just learn" nên sửa thành "I just learned". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi lặp từ và chưa rõ ràng, bạn nên nói rõ hơn về trải nghiệm học hát của mình và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc.

範例: Yes, I had the chance to learn singing when I was in middle school. I only learned the basics, not professionally. During that time, I also learned many Vietnamese folk songs, which I really enjoyed.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng chưa chính xác như "seeing for myself" nên là "singing for myself". Bạn nên sửa lỗi này và dùng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp ý để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

範例: Definitely, I prefer to sing for myself because I am an introverted person and feel shy singing in front of a crowd. Singing alone helps me reduce stress and makes me feel relaxed and happy.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, câu không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên tránh dùng từ thừa như "uh" và sắp xếp lại câu cho rõ ràng, sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời logic hơn. Ngoài ra, nên cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. When people sing, they can connect with the lyrics and express their emotions. Moreover, singing emotional songs with friends and family during special occasions helps everyone relax and enjoy the moment.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it's helped me to feel relaxed and happy after a busy day and also when I raise my voice I it is the great way for me to reduce stress and express my emotions.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me to feel relaxed and happy after a busy day, and also when I raise my voice, it is a great way for me to reduce stress and express my emotions.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes tenses and has an extra pronoun 'I'. 'It's helped' should be 'it helps' to match the present tense context. Also, 'I it is' is incorrect; the pronoun 'I' is unnecessary here. Use 'a great way' instead of 'the great way' because it is one of many ways.

× Sometime I also sing along with my friends or my relatives which help us to bond and strengthen our relationship.

✓ Sometimes I also sing along with my friends or my relatives, which helps us to bond and strengthen our relationships.

The word 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Which help' should be 'which helps' because the relative pronoun refers to the singular action of singing. 'Relationship' should be plural 'relationships' because it refers to multiple relationships with friends and relatives.

× Yes, of course I have a chance to learn singing when I was a child, like when I was middle school, but I'm just learn the basic one, not the professional.

✓ Yes, of course I had a chance to learn singing when I was a child, like when I was in middle school, but I just learned the basics, not professionally.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Have a chance' should be 'had a chance' to match past time. 'I'm just learn' is incorrect; it should be 'I just learned'. 'The basic one' is awkward; 'the basics' is better. 'Not the professional' should be 'not professionally' to describe the manner of learning.

× And I have a chance to learn a lot of Vietnamese folk songs and I really and I really enjoyed it.

✓ And I had a chance to learn a lot of Vietnamese folk songs, and I really enjoyed it.

Again, 'have a chance' should be 'had a chance' to indicate past time. The phrase 'I really and I really enjoyed it' is repetitive; it should be simplified to 'I really enjoyed it'.

× Definitely myself because I'm the introvert person so I really shy to sing in front of the crowd and I really enjoy seeing for myself because it's helped me to reduce stress.

✓ Definitely myself because I'm an introverted person, so I am really shy to sing in front of a crowd, and I really enjoy singing for myself because it helps me to reduce stress.

'The introvert person' should be 'an introverted person' to use the correct article and adjective form. 'I really shy' is incorrect; it should be 'I am really shy'. 'Seeing for myself' is incorrect; it should be 'singing for myself'. 'It's helped' should be 'it helps' to maintain present tense.

× And as I said before, I feel really relaxed and happy when I raise my voice.

✓ And as I said before, I feel really relaxed and happy when I raise my voice.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× Yes, of course. Like I think when people sing, they can uh, see this themselves throughout the lyrics of the song and also singing the emotional song help people to express their feelings and someone, a singer with friends and relatives in special occasion help people to relax.

✓ Yes, of course. I think when people sing, they can see themselves through the lyrics of the song, and also singing emotional songs helps people to express their feelings. Singing with friends and relatives on special occasions helps people to relax.

'See this themselves' is awkward; 'see themselves' is better. 'Singing the emotional song help' should be 'singing emotional songs helps' to agree in number and subject-verb agreement. 'Someone, a singer with friends and relatives' is unclear; it should be 'singing with friends and relatives'. 'In special occasion' should be 'on special occasions' to use correct preposition and plural form.