唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps improve my mood when I'm feeling down. For example, listening to or singing my favourite songs can make me feel happier and more relaxed. Although some people believe music might affect health negatively, I think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks.

建議: Provide a clear and grammatically correct response. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your learning experience.

範例: No, I haven't taken formal music classes. However, when I was in school, my singing teacher taught me how to sing properly, so I learned the basics there.

建議: Make your answer more direct and structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating the same points. Be specific about who you sing for and why.

範例: I usually sing for myself because it helps me relax and improve my mood. Moreover, in today's busy world, I believe everyone should take some time daily to enjoy singing as it can positively affect their lives.

建議: Improve your grammar and clarity. Use linking words to explain your opinion with specific examples or personal experience.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Many songs are created to uplift moods and make listeners feel better. From my own experience, singing has helped me feel happier during difficult times.

× Yes, I like to sing music When I was feeling not good, I sing music and I think that music can change people's mood and it is very important in everyone's life.

✓ Yes, I like to sing music. When I am not feeling good, I sing music and I think that music can change people's mood and it is very important in everyone's life.

The phrase 'When I was feeling not good' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'When I am not feeling good' to express a general present condition. Also, 'I sing music' is better as 'I sing' or 'I sing songs' but since 'music' is uncountable, 'sing music' is acceptable. Added a period to separate sentences for clarity.

× No actually I don't go any music classes but when I was in school my singing teacher tell me how to sing song properly so I only learn in my school how to sing.

✓ No, actually I don't go to any music classes but when I was in school my singing teacher told me how to sing songs properly so I only learned in my school how to sing.

The verbs 'tell' and 'learn' should be in the past tense 'told' and 'learned' to match the past time frame 'when I was in school'. Also, 'go any music classes' should be 'go to any music classes' to use the correct preposition.

× No actually I don't go any music classes but when I was in school my singing teacher tell me how to sing song properly so I only learn in my school how to sing.

✓ No, actually I don't go to any music classes but when I was in school my singing teacher told me how to sing songs properly so I only learned in my school how to sing.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' when referring to attending classes or places, so 'go any music classes' should be 'go to any music classes'. Also, 'sing song' should be 'sing songs' to be plural and correct.

× I like myself and I sing for myself because I think that music and singing can change people's mood and change peoples life.

✓ I like myself and I sing for myself because I think that music and singing can change people's moods and change people's lives.

The plural possessive form 'people's' should be used consistently, and 'mood' and 'life' should be pluralized to 'moods' and 'lives' to refer to multiple people.

× So in the modern and busy world I think that all people should sing a song in a day.

✓ So in the modern and busy world I think that all people should sing a song a day.

The phrase 'in a day' is incorrect here; the correct expression is 'a song a day' to indicate frequency.

× Some singing songs and musics are made for feel, feeling better and feeling happy to people.

✓ Some songs and music are made to help people feel better and happier.

'Singing songs' is redundant; 'songs' suffices. 'Musics' is incorrect as 'music' is uncountable. The phrase 'made for feel, feeling better and feeling happy to people' is ungrammatical; it should be 'made to help people feel better and happier'.

× Some singing songs and musics are made for feel, feeling better and feeling happy to people.

✓ Some songs and music are made to help people feel better and happier.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used before 'feel'; the correct form is 'made to help people feel'. Also, 'to people' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× It is really work I experience at all from my experience.

✓ It really works, I have experienced it myself.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'It is really work' should be 'It really works'. 'I experience at all from my experience' is redundant and incorrect; 'I have experienced it myself' is clearer and grammatically correct.