唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more coherent. Try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your response within 5 sentences. Also, use simpler and correct vocabulary to express your thoughts naturally.

範例: No, I don't like singing because I think I have a terrible voice. However, I sometimes sing when I take a bath because no one is around to judge me. Singing in private makes me feel comfortable, but I prefer not to sing in front of others.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid repetition. Keep your sentences simple and precise.

範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was a child, I attended a few singing classes and even performed on stage. However, as I grew older, I lost confidence and stopped singing in public.

建議: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and clearer expression. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid grammatical mistakes. Also, try to be more specific and concise in your explanation.

範例: I would like to sing a song for my mother. There is a song from the movie "Son of Mahalakshmi" that shows the strong bond between a mother and son. My mother never judges me when I sing, so I prefer to sing for her rather than others.

建議: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and better sentence structure. Use linking words to make your points flow smoothly and avoid vague expressions.

範例: Absolutely, singing brings happiness to people. Many find singing therapeutic and enjoyable. For example, my friends love to sing because it helps them relax and feel joyful.

× I think I have a very I have terrible voice to sing.

✓ I think I have a very terrible voice to sing.

The phrase 'I have a very I have terrible voice' contains a repetition and incorrect article usage. 'Voice' is singular and requires the article 'a' before it. The correct sentence removes the repeated phrase and uses 'a very terrible voice' to indicate singular noun with appropriate article.

× Even I wait.

✓ Even I wait.

The sentence 'Even I wait.' is incomplete and unclear in context. It seems to be a fragment or misused pronoun. However, since it does not fit the grammar problem types listed, no correction is made.

× We find we find it weird when I sync.

✓ We find it weird when I sing.

The sentence repeats 'we find' unnecessarily and uses 'sync' instead of 'sing'. 'Sync' is a verb meaning to synchronize, which is incorrect here. The correct verb is 'sing'. The repetition is removed for clarity.

× I'm mostly a apart from singer.

✓ I'm mostly an amateur singer.

The phrase 'a apart from singer' is incorrect. 'Apart from' is a preposition phrase that does not fit here. Likely, the intended meaning is 'amateur singer'. Also, 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. The correction replaces the phrase with 'an amateur singer'.

× I would say because I enjoyed it, because there is no one to judge me when I sing them.

✓ I would say I enjoy it because there is no one to judge me when I sing.

The sentence uses 'because' twice unnecessarily and 'sing them' is incorrect. 'Sing' is a verb that does not take 'them' as an object here. The correction removes the redundant 'because' and 'them' to improve clarity and grammar.

× This I have learned to sing.

✓ I have learned to sing.

The phrase 'This I have learned to sing.' is awkward and incorrect. The word 'This' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence structure. The correction removes 'This' to form a proper present perfect sentence.

× I've attended few classes when I was a kid, I went classes to make sure other time singing well and even I've performed singing in a stage.

✓ I've attended a few classes when I was a kid. I went to classes to improve my singing, and I've even performed on a stage.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'few' should be 'a few' to indicate some classes; 'went classes' lacks the preposition 'to'; 'make sure other time singing well' is unclear and corrected to 'improve my singing'; 'performed singing in a stage' is incorrect, corrected to 'performed on a stage'.

× Even when we were When you grow up, I I don't think you have the confidence that no one will just so I I sang.

✓ Even when we were young, I didn't think I had the confidence because no one would judge me, so I sang.

The sentence is fragmented and confusing. 'When you grow up' is inconsistent with 'we were'. The tense is corrected to past ('didn't think', 'had', 'would judge') to match the context. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I wanted to sing this song for mother.

✓ I want to sing this song for my mother.

The question is in present tense about current desire. 'Wanted' is past tense, which is inconsistent. Changing to 'want' aligns with the question. Also, 'mother' should be 'my mother' to specify.

× I would like dedicated to her a dedicate a song to work from a movie call in current son of Mahalakshmi.

✓ I would like to dedicate a song to her from a movie called 'Current Son of Mahalakshmi'.

The sentence has incorrect verb form 'dedicated' instead of 'to dedicate', and awkward phrasing 'a dedicate a song to work'. The correction uses the infinitive 'to dedicate' and clarifies the movie title with 'called'.

× This movie depicts up the bond between a mother and a son.

✓ This movie depicts the bond between a mother and a son.

The phrase 'depicts up' is incorrect. The verb 'depict' does not require 'up'. Removing 'up' corrects the sentence.

× I think my mother don't judge me whenever I sing apart from singing to others.

✓ I think my mother doesn't judge me whenever I sing, unlike others.

'Mother' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' not 'don't'. Also, 'apart from singing to others' is awkward; 'unlike others' is clearer.

× Is absolutely.

✓ It absolutely is.

The sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'It' makes it a complete sentence. The modal verb 'is' is used correctly but needs a subject.

× Where there are people, they might find these in singing, they find it very therapeutic I would say.

✓ Where there are people, they might find peace in singing; I would say they find it very therapeutic.

The phrase 'find these in singing' is incorrect; 'these' is plural and unclear. Replacing with 'peace' or 'comfort' fits the context. The sentence is split for clarity.

× And there are my friends around my circle itself.

✓ And there are my friends in my circle.

'Around my circle itself' is awkward and redundant. 'In my circle' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× People love to sing. I find it some people, it is therapy for them.

✓ People love to sing. I find that for some people, it is therapy.

The sentence 'I find it some people' is ungrammatical. Adding 'that' and rearranging improves clarity and grammar.