唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Та илүү тодорхой, шууд хариулт өгч, илүү байгалийн хэллэг ашиглах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, I liked singing when I was a child, but as a teenager, I realized I wasn't very good at it." гэж хэлж болно.

範例: Yes, I liked singing when I was a child, but as a teenager, I realized I wasn't very good at it.

建議: Хариултаа илүү ойлгомжтой, логик холбоотой болгох хэрэгтэй. "Yes, my music teacher in kindergarten taught me how to sing, and she was very good at playing the piano." гэж хэлж болно.

範例: Yes, my music teacher in kindergarten taught me how to sing, and she was very good at playing the piano.

建議: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, эерэг утгатай, логик холбоотой болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I would like to sing for my husband to express my love and feelings to him." гэж хэлж болно.

範例: I would like to sing for my husband to express my love and feelings to him.

建議: Хариултаа илүү цэгцтэй, холбоотой, тодорхой болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I believe singing brings happiness because it makes people smile and feel joyful." гэж хэлж болно.

範例: I believe singing brings happiness because it makes people smile and feel joyful.

× At my teenagers year, I found that I'm bad at singing.

✓ In my teenage years, I found that I was bad at singing.

The phrase 'At my teenagers year' is incorrect; it should be 'In my teenage years' to refer to that period of life. Also, 'I'm bad at singing' should be in past tense 'I was bad at singing' to match the past time frame indicated by 'found'.

× When I was at kindergarten, my music teacher taught me how to sing underpay not and she really she was really good at a piano, playing piano.

✓ When I was in kindergarten, my music teacher taught me how to sing properly and she was really good at playing the piano.

The preposition 'at' should be 'in' when referring to being inside a place like kindergarten. 'Underpay not' is incorrect and should be 'properly'. The phrase 'she really she was really good at a piano, playing piano' is redundant and awkward; it should be 'she was really good at playing the piano'. Also, 'a piano' should be 'the piano' because we refer to the instrument generally with the definite article.

× I would like to sing from my husband 'cause he always curse me and he always share my opinion and my emotions and from my song I would like to tell him how much I love love him.

✓ I would like to sing for my husband because he always curses me and he always shares my opinions and my emotions, and through my song I would like to tell him how much I love him.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; it should be 'for' to indicate the person you want to sing to. 'Curse me' should be 'curses me' to agree with third person singular. 'Share my opinion' should be 'shares my opinions' to agree with the subject and pluralize 'opinions'. 'From my song' should be 'through my song' to express the means of communication.

× I believe that a singing can bring happiness to people because I saw that people will when people are singing they become happy and always smiling.

✓ I believe that singing can bring happiness to people because I saw that when people are singing, they become happy and always smile.

The article 'a' before 'singing' is incorrect because 'singing' is an uncountable noun here. The phrase 'people will when people are singing' is awkward and redundant; it should be 'when people are singing'. Also, 'always smiling' should be 'always smile' to maintain parallel verb form.

× And it always gives a bright. Emotions.

✓ And it always gives bright emotions.

The period after 'bright' is incorrect and breaks the sentence. 'Emotions' is plural and should not be separated. The adjective 'bright' correctly modifies 'emotions' without an article.