唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is honest but a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add a reason or feeling. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy. However, I am not confident about my voice, so I usually sing only when I am alone.

建議: Your answer is relevant but the sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Use clear and simple sentences to express the time period and your experience. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I learnt singing at school. From around 6th grade to 10th grade, I had the opportunity to take singing lessons.

建議: Good answer with clear reasons. To improve, try to use linking words and vary your vocabulary a bit more. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas in two sentences; combine them for better flow.

範例: I would like to sing for my friends because they have always supported me in every situation, so dedicating a song to them feels special.

建議: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid repeating the same idea in different ways; instead, explain your point with examples or reasons.

範例: I think singing brings happiness mainly to people who enjoy music. However, those who do not like music may not feel happy when singing.

× my voice is not so much good

✓ my voice is not very good

The phrase 'so much good' is incorrect. The correct adverb to modify 'good' is 'very'. So, 'not very good' is the proper form to express a low degree of quality.

× sing in the public

✓ sing in public

The phrase 'in the public' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'in public' without the definite article 'the' when referring to performing before people.

× when I was starting in school near bout from a 6th grade to tell the 10th grade I got a chance to study and learn about singing

✓ when I started school, from around 6th grade to 10th grade, I got a chance to study and learn about singing

The phrase 'was starting in school near bout from a 6th grade to tell the 10th grade' is grammatically incorrect and awkward. The past tense 'started' is appropriate here. Also, 'near bout' should be 'around', and 'to tell' should be 'to'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing to?

The verb 'sing' is usually followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the person receiving the song. So, 'sing to someone' is correct, not 'sing for someone' in this context.

× I love to dedicate a song to my friends because they are very close to me and they were there for me in every situation.

✓ I love to dedicate a song to my friends because they are very close to me and have been there for me in every situation.

The phrase 'they were there for me' suggests past only. Since the support is ongoing, present perfect 'have been there' is more appropriate.

× I feel there do singing brings happiness to only limited number of people who love to listen music or sing songs.

✓ I feel singing brings happiness to only a limited number of people who love to listen to music or sing songs.

The phrase 'there do singing brings' is incorrect. 'Singing brings' is correct. Also, 'listen music' should be 'listen to music'. The article 'a' is needed before 'limited number'.

× But those who are not very likely to enjoy music, they are.

✓ But those who are not very likely to enjoy music are not happy.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. The phrase 'they are' is ambiguous. It should be completed to express the intended meaning clearly.

× They do not get happy whenever they sing a song.

✓ They do not feel happy whenever they sing a song.

The phrase 'get happy' is informal and less appropriate here. 'Feel happy' is more suitable to express the emotional state.