唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be careful with pronunciation and word choice, for example, 'spinning' should be 'singing'. Also, try to avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise and natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I do. Singing helps me release negative energy after a long day, and I find it very entertaining. Moreover, it allows me to showcase my singing talent.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to speak clearly and organise your ideas logically. Use complete sentences and avoid filler words. Also, use linking words to express your future plans.

範例: No, I haven't learnt how to sing formally. I usually sing using my natural skills, but in the future, I would like to join some singing classes to improve.

建議: Try to speak more clearly and use correct verb forms. Avoid fragmented sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about your audience and explain why you want to sing for them.

範例: Most of the time, I sing for my friends when we are hanging out or partying. However, in the future, I would like to sing for my parents and grandparents to make them happy.

建議: Improve your pronunciation and sentence structure. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly and provide specific reasons or examples.

範例: Yes, absolutely. From what I know, singing and music produce healing frequencies that can improve people's mood. So, when I or my friends have a bad day, singing helps us feel better.

× I really like spinning.

✓ I really like singing.

The student mistakenly wrote 'spinning' instead of 'singing'. The verb 'like' is correctly followed by the '-ing' form, but the word itself is incorrect in context. The correction is to use the correct verb 'singing' to match the topic.

× For me, singing is like releasing all the negative energy that I have had throughout the day and also it was quite entertaining an also it can show off my singing talent.

✓ For me, singing is like releasing all the negative energy that I have had throughout the day; it is also quite entertaining and can show off my singing talent.

The original sentence is a run-on with poor conjunction use and missing punctuation. The phrase 'and also it was quite entertaining an also it can show off' is awkward and ungrammatical. The correction splits the sentence properly and uses 'it is also' and 'and can' to connect ideas clearly.

× No I haven't ashes saying bye, I just saying with my. Oh mine. Natural skills I guess.

✓ No, I haven't learned any singing lessons; I just sing with my natural skills, I guess.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains nonsensical phrases like 'ashes saying bye' and 'I just saying with my. Oh mine.' The correction clarifies the intended meaning, correcting verb forms and sentence structure to express that the student has not taken lessons but sings naturally.

× But in the future, I think that I would like to. Join some singing classes.

✓ But in the future, I think that I would like to join some singing classes.

The original sentence has an unnecessary full stop after 'to' which breaks the sentence. The correction removes the full stop to maintain the correct future intention expression 'would like to join'.

× Actually the. Most of the time I was just seeing from a friends to hear when we are hanging out or when we were partying.

✓ Actually, most of the time I was just singing for friends to hear when we were hanging out or when we were partying.

The original sentence has 'seeing' instead of 'singing' and 'a friends' which is incorrect because 'friends' is plural and should not have 'a'. Also, tense consistency is improved by using 'were' instead of 'are' to match past context.

× But I think that in the future I would like to expand my audience to into. To my parents, grandparents.

✓ But I think that in the future I would like to expand my audience to my parents and grandparents.

The phrase 'to into. To' is incorrect and redundant. The correction removes 'into' and the extra 'to' and uses 'and' to list the audience properly.

× According to my knowledge, seeing in singing in music, they brings some healing frequencies for people.

✓ According to my knowledge, singing in music brings some healing frequencies for people.

The original sentence has 'seeing in singing in music' which is incorrect and 'they brings' which is a subject-verb agreement error. The correction removes 'seeing' and uses singular verb 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing'.

× So if if I have a bad day or even my friends or someone that have a bad day, I think that singing is also.

✓ So if I have a bad day or even if my friends or someone else has a bad day, I think that singing helps.

The original sentence has repeated 'if', missing conjunctions, and ends abruptly with 'singing is also.' The correction removes repetition, adds missing words, corrects subject-verb agreement ('someone else has'), and completes the thought with 'helps'.