唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I like singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. I am also a big fan of a Punjabi singer named Red Cara, whose beautiful singing motivates me.'

範例: I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. Moreover, I admire a Punjabi singer called Red Cara, whose beautiful voice always motivates me to sing better.

建議: Your answer has repetition and grammatical mistakes. Be direct and clear. Use linking words to show contrast. For example, 'Although my parents do not support me pursuing singing, I have secretly taken singing classes on YouTube.'

範例: Although my parents are not very supportive of me pursuing singing, I have secretly taken some singing classes on YouTube to improve my skills.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Be specific and use linking words to organise your ideas. For example, 'Firstly, I want to sing songs that reflect my culture and region. Secondly, I would like to explore pop and rock music genres.'

範例: Firstly, I want to sing songs that represent my culture and local traditions. Secondly, I plan to explore singing pop and rock music to broaden my style.

建議: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to answer directly and clearly. For example, 'Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and feel less burdened after a long day.'

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness as it helps people relax and reduces their stress after a tiring day.

× Well, I really like to sing as it helps me to distress my mind and to be burden less.

✓ Well, I really like singing as it helps me to de-stress my mind and to be less burdened.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Also, 'distress' is incorrect here; the correct term is 'de-stress' meaning to relax. 'Burden less' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'less burdened' to describe feeling relieved from burdens.

× However, I am too much obsessed with a Punjabi singer name Red Cara who sings so interesting Lee Ann beautifully which wake me motivated.

✓ However, I am very obsessed with a Punjabi singer named Red Cara who sings so interestingly and beautifully which wakes me up motivated.

The phrase 'too much obsessed' is incorrect; 'very obsessed' is appropriate. 'Name' should be 'named' to describe the singer. 'Interesting Lee Ann' is a mishearing or typo; it should be 'interestingly'. 'Wake me motivated' should be 'wakes me up motivated' to correctly express the effect.

× To be very honest, my parents are not too much supportive for me to go in a singing domain.

✓ To be very honest, my parents are not very supportive of me going into the singing domain.

'Too much supportive' is incorrect; 'not very supportive' is correct. The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'of' is appropriate. Also, 'to go in a singing domain' should be 'going into the singing domain' to express the intended meaning.

× However, I have secretly secretly taken a YouTube classes for singing.

✓ However, I have secretly taken YouTube classes for singing.

The phrase 'taken a YouTube classes' is incorrect; 'taken YouTube classes' is correct as 'classes' is plural and does not need 'a'. Also, the repetition of 'secretly' is redundant and removed.

× To be very honest, the first thing I would like to sing is about my culture and my division.

✓ To be very honest, the first thing I would like to sing about is my culture and my region.

The phrase 'sing is about' is incorrect; it should be 'sing about'. Also, 'division' is likely a mistranslation or incorrect word; 'region' fits better in this context.

× Secondly, I will pursue it with pop music and rock worth.

✓ Secondly, I will pursue it with pop music and rock music.

'Rock worth' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'rock music'. This correction clarifies the genres mentioned.

× According to my answers back pail of course yes, singing and discuss individual minds and make them burden less after a long thing.

✓ According to my answer, of course yes, singing helps to relax individual minds and makes them less burdened after a long day.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Answers back pail' is incorrect; 'answer' is correct. 'Discuss individual minds' is incorrect; 'relax individual minds' fits the context. 'Make them burden less' should be 'makes them less burdened'. 'After a long thing' is vague; 'after a long day' is appropriate.