唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to be more concise and natural by directly answering the question first, then adding a brief reason. Avoid phrases like "God gifted inherited talent" which sound unnatural. Instead, use simpler expressions.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially romantic songs and rap. I often sing in front of my family and friends because it makes me happy.

建議: Your answer is informative but a bit repetitive with the word "various" and lacks clear structure. Start with a direct answer, then mention the artists who inspire you, and finally talk about your learning experience using linking words for coherence.

範例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. For example, I draw inspiration from singers like Arijit Singh and Diljit Dosanjh. Moreover, I have taken tuition classes to improve my skills.

建議: Your answer is too long and contains some unclear phrases like "inedited God gifted talent." Try to be clear and concise by directly answering who you want to sing for and why. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I want to sing for my family, friends, and many others because I hope to pursue singing as a career. This way, I can inspire people and help preserve the art of music.

建議: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat unclear. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then explain how singing helps with stress and anxiety using linking words. Keep sentences simple and coherent.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. It helps reduce stress and anxiety, and allows people to express their feelings. Therefore, singing can make people feel joyful in the moment.

× I generally like to sing some romantic songs and some rap as well and it's my God gifted inherited talent that I generally expressed in front of my family as well as my friends.

✓ I generally like to sing some romantic songs and some rap as well and it's my God gifted inherited talent that I generally express in front of my family as well as my friends.

The verb 'expressed' is incorrectly used in past participle form here; the sentence is in present tense context, so the base form 'express' should be used to maintain tense consistency.

× I draw inspiration from various artists and various good singers like Arijit Singh Current or Gila and Diljit Dosanjh and I also took various tuition classes to improve my singing skills.

✓ I draw inspiration from various artists and good singers like Arijit Singh, Current or Gila, and Diljit Dosanjh, and I have also taken various tuition classes to improve my singing skills.

The verb 'took' is simple past tense, but the context suggests an experience relevant to the present, so present perfect 'have taken' is more appropriate to indicate ongoing relevance.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

The pronoun 'Who' is incorrectly used as the object of the verb; 'Whom' is the correct object form in formal English when referring to the object of 'sing for'.

× I want to sing for my family, for my friends, as well As for various people as I want to pursue singing as my career because it's a inedited God gifted talent of mine that I want to use so that I'm able to inspire people to create good music an preserve this art.

✓ I want to sing for my family, for my friends, as well as for various people because I want to pursue singing as my career since it's an innate God gifted talent of mine that I want to use so that I'm able to inspire people to create good music and preserve this art.

The phrase 'as well As' should be 'as well as' in lowercase; 'inedited' is incorrect and should be 'innate'; 'an' should be used before vowel sounds; 'an preserve' is incorrect and should be 'and preserve'. These corrections fix preposition and article usage errors.

× Singing something that can reduce your stress, that can diminish your anxiety and it can help you to come yourself an it is something which through which you can relate your various life instances and you can enjoy yourself in that moment.

✓ Singing is something that can reduce your stress, diminish your anxiety, and help you to calm yourself. It is something through which you can relate to various life instances and enjoy yourself in the moment.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'Singing', making it incomplete. Also, 'come yourself an' is incorrect and should be 'calm yourself'. The sentence is long and confusing; breaking it into two sentences improves clarity and structure.