唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'bad voice for singer' and 'chose not sync.' To improve, use clearer and more natural expressions, avoid redundancy, and keep sentences concise. For example, say 'I don't enjoy singing because I have a poor singing voice and find it hard to remember lyrics.'

範例: I don't enjoy singing because I have a poor singing voice and find it hard to remember lyrics. Therefore, I usually avoid singing in public.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors and incomplete sentences, which affect coherence. To improve, respond directly with clear sentences, use correct vocabulary ('sing' instead of 'sync'), and provide specific details logically connected with linking words. Avoid incomplete thoughts.

範例: Yes, I tried to learn singing in high school by joining my church choir. We practiced regularly, and the choir leader was a great example who taught us proper techniques. However, I stopped after moving to a new city.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains many unclear phrases and errors. To improve, answer directly with clear and relevant details, avoid unrelated or unclear statements, and use correct vocabulary. For example, say 'I don't have anyone specific to sing for now, but if I had to, it would be my wife or children.'

範例: Currently, I don't have anyone specific to sing for. However, if I had the chance, I would sing for my wife or my children to make them happy.

建議: Your answer is partially relevant but includes unrelated examples and incomplete sentences, which reduce clarity. To improve, focus on the question, provide clear reasons or examples related to singing, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and enjoy themselves. For example, many people sing at celebrations to feel joyful and connected.

× I have a bad voice for singer.

✓ I have a bad voice for singing.

The phrase 'for singer' is incorrect because 'singer' is a singular noun, but the intended meaning is about the activity of singing. The correct form is the gerund 'singing' to indicate the activity.

× I have difficulty in remembering lyrics which are good for singing.

✓ I have difficulty remembering lyrics that are good for singing.

The phrase 'difficulty in remembering' is acceptable but 'difficulty remembering' is more natural. Also, 'which' should be 'that' to define the specific lyrics. The sentence is improved for clarity and natural usage.

× So these are the two reasons why I chose not sync.

✓ So these are the two reasons why I chose not to sing.

The verb 'sync' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. Also, the phrase 'chose not sync' is missing the infinitive 'to' before the verb. The correct form is 'chose not to sing'.

× Yes, I have tried to learn how to sync.

✓ Yes, I have tried to learn how to sing.

The verb 'sync' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'sing'. The sentence is in present perfect tense, which is appropriate here.

× During my high school days, I joined my church choir. Where we practically mostly sync humans.

✓ During my high school days, I joined my church choir, where we mostly sang together.

The second sentence is a fragment starting with 'Where'. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma. Also, 'sync humans' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'sang together' or 'sang in harmony'.

× At the church there was a good example trying to sync then how to sync.

✓ At the church, there was a good example of trying to sing and how to sing.

The phrase 'trying to sync then how to sync' is unclear and uses the wrong verb 'sync'. It should be 'trying to sing and how to sing'. Also, adding 'of' after 'example' clarifies the meaning.

× But when I moved to Tasha I moved away from house and that can.

✓ But when I moved to Tasha, I moved away from home and that was it.

The phrase 'moved away from house and that can' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'House' should be 'home', and 'that can' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'that was it' or similar. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× For now I don't have any one particular man I would want to sing for, but if in the near future I was put in a position where I had a sync I think it would definitely have to be my kiss or probably my wife.

✓ For now, I don't have any particular person I would want to sing for, but if in the near future I were put in a position where I had to sing, I think it would definitely have to be my kids or probably my wife.

The phrase 'any one particular man' is incorrect; 'any particular person' is more appropriate. 'I was put' should be subjunctive 'I were put' for hypothetical situations. 'Had a sync' is incorrect; it should be 'had to sing'. 'My kiss' is a mishearing of 'my kids'. The sentence is corrected for pronoun use, verb form, and clarity.

× You know kids in need to be sent to. Engelli stages which sued them and put them to a good sleep.

✓ You know, kids need to be sent to special stages which soothe them and put them to a good sleep.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors. 'Kids in need to be sent to' is incorrect; it should be 'kids need to be sent to'. 'Engelli stages which sued them' is likely a mishearing; 'special stages which soothe them' makes sense. The sentence is corrected for pronoun use and clarity.

× Yes, I think singing can bring hapiness to people as an activity.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people as an activity.

The word 'hapiness' is a misspelling of 'happiness', which is a noun. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity.

× People enjoy. Uhm, hiding seek football running. Play looking for an example and it brings them happiness.

✓ People enjoy activities like hide and seek, football, running, and playing. For example, these activities bring them happiness.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. 'Hiding seek' should be 'hide and seek'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.