唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Та илүү тодорхой, логик холбоос үг ашиглан хариултаа сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Singing helps me relax and improves my mood, especially after studying for many hours. Although I am not perfect at it, I enjoy singing a lot." гэж хэлж болно.

範例: I like singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood, especially after studying for many hours. Although I am not perfect at it, I enjoy singing a lot.

建議: Хариулт тань ойлгомжгүй, үг хэллэг буруу хэрэглэсэн байна. Илүү энгийн, тодорхой өгүүлбэр ашиглаж, логик холбоос үг нэмэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Yes, I have not learned singing professionally, but I attended a choir in primary school which helped improve my vocals."

範例: Yes, I have not learned singing professionally, but I attended a choir in primary school which helped improve my vocals.

建議: Хариулт тань ойлгомжгүй, үг хэллэг буруу хэрэглэсэн байна. Илүү энгийн, тодорхой өгүүлбэр ашиглаж, логик холбоос үг нэмэх хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "I want to sing for my brother because he never judges me. Also, we have similar music tastes, so singing together is enjoyable."

範例: I want to sing for my brother because he never judges me. Also, we have similar music tastes, so singing together is enjoyable.

建議: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоос үг ашиглан сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, "Obviously, singing is one of the best ways to boost your mood and bring happiness. Music is a form of art with many types, each reflecting our emotions and inner feelings."

範例: Obviously, singing is one of the best ways to boost your mood and bring happiness. Music is a form of art with many types, each reflecting our emotions and inner feelings.

× Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me to most.

✓ Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me the most.

The phrase 'helps me to most' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'helps me the most' to indicate the highest degree. The article 'the' is necessary before 'most' in this superlative form.

× My mood also give me energy to work.

✓ My mood also gives me energy to work.

The subject 'My mood' is singular, so the verb should be in third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the subject.

× Forward after maybe studying for many hours.

✓ I feel energized after studying for many hours.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a subject and verb, making it a sentence fragment. A complete sentence with subject and verb is needed for clarity.

× Didn't learn how to sing in professional music.

✓ I didn't learn how to sing professionally.

The sentence lacks a subject and uses incorrect phrase 'in professional music'. The correct form is 'I didn't learn how to sing professionally' using the adverb form to describe the manner of learning.

× Horse.

✓ (Remove this word as it is irrelevant and unclear.)

The word 'Horse' is out of context and does not form a meaningful sentence. It should be removed for clarity.

× However I used to go to core when I was in primary school which.

✓ However, I used to go to choir when I was in primary school, which

The word 'core' is likely a misspelling of 'choir'. The sentence is incomplete and needs a comma after 'However' and 'choir' instead of 'core'.

× Has affected my vocals.

✓ has affected my vocals.

This is a sentence fragment missing a subject. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rewritten as 'This has affected my vocals.'

× More.

✓ (Remove this word as it is incomplete and unclear.)

The word 'More.' is a fragment and does not form a complete sentence. It should be removed.

× Better.

✓ (Remove this word as it is incomplete and unclear.)

The word 'Better.' is a fragment and does not form a complete sentence. It should be removed.

× I want to sing for my brother because he doesn't judge me whatever it is.

✓ I want to sing for my brother because he doesn't judge me, whatever it is.

A comma is needed before 'whatever it is' to separate the clauses properly for clarity.

× Also singing for my brother would be fun because we bought can't seeing that perfect so we match so good.

✓ Also, singing for my brother would be fun because we both can't sing that perfectly, so we match well.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'bought' should be 'both'; 'can't seeing' should be 'can't sing'; 'that perfect' should be 'that perfectly'; 'so we match so good' should be 'so we match well'. The sentence structure and word choice are corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Also our music type is pretty similar.

✓ Also, our music taste is pretty similar.

'Music type' is not a common collocation; 'music taste' is more appropriate. A comma after 'Also' improves sentence flow.

× Is obviously singing is one of the best ways to boost.

✓ Obviously, singing is one of the best ways to boost

The phrase 'Is obviously singing is' is incorrect. The correct form is 'Obviously, singing is'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs to be connected to the next part.

× You're my mood and give happiness.

✓ your mood and give happiness.

'You're' is a contraction of 'you are' and is incorrect here. The correct possessive pronoun is 'your'. Also, this phrase should be connected to the previous sentence for completeness.

× Music is a big kind of art.

✓ Music is a major form of art.

The phrase 'a big kind of art' is awkward and unidiomatic. 'A major form of art' is a more natural expression.

× It has many different types and each of them can reflect to our emotions and also inner side.

✓ It has many different types, and each of them can reflect our emotions and inner feelings.

The phrase 'reflect to our emotions' is incorrect; 'reflect our emotions' is correct. 'Inner side' is unclear; 'inner feelings' is more appropriate. A comma is added before 'and' for clarity.