唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있으며, 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 또한, 문장이 명확하지 않고 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 좀 더 명확하고 간결하게 자신의 생각을 표현하고, 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가야 합니다.

範例: I don't really enjoy singing, especially in front of others, because I feel shy. Therefore, I prefer listening to music rather than performing myself.

建議: 답변이 단편적이고 문장이 끊어져 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 이유나 배경을 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 개선해야 합니다.

範例: I don't recall taking formal singing lessons, but I did learn some singing techniques from my ex-boyfriend because he loves singing and music.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 구성해야 합니다.

範例: I would love to sing for my mother because she has always supported and encouraged me. Singing for her would be a wonderful way to show my appreciation.

建議: 답변에 문법 오류와 부자연스러운 표현이 많으며, 문장 연결이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 제시하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가야 합니다.

範例: Absolutely, singing can bring great joy because it allows people to express their emotions and connect with others. For example, I was over the moon when I attended the Black Pink concert because I really enjoyed it.

× So I try to avoid attention of others in public.

✓ So I try to avoid the attention of others in public.

The phrase 'attention of others' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'the attention of others' to specify the attention being referred to.

× For example, I put I prefer this into music rather than performing it's myself.

✓ For example, I prefer to put this into music rather than performing it myself.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and awkward phrasing. 'Put I prefer this into music' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to put this into music'. Also, 'performing it's myself' should be 'performing it myself'.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a British English past tense form; 'learned' is more common in American English. Both are acceptable, but consistency is important. Since the rest of the transcript uses American English, 'learned' is preferred.

× Well, I don't remember that exactly. But. The first thing that comes to my mind is. Uhm learning singing from my ex-boyfriend because I think that.

✓ Well, I don't remember that exactly, but the first thing that comes to my mind is learning singing from my ex-boyfriend because I think that.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper connection. Combining the fragments into one sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× He really loves singing and listening to music.

✓ He really loves singing and listening to music.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Honestly, I would love to sing for my mother. Because hard dedication and admire.

✓ Honestly, I would love to sing for my mother because of her hard dedication and admirable qualities.

The sentence fragment 'Because hard dedication and admire' is incomplete and unclear. It should be connected to the previous sentence and clarified.

× It is really good and she is awaiting supporting me and encouraging me.

✓ She is really good and she is always supporting and encouraging me.

'It is really good' is unclear and likely incorrect here. 'Awaiting supporting me' is incorrect; 'always supporting me' is correct.

× Umso singing for hardwood a wonderful way to.

✓ So singing for her would be a wonderful way to show my appreciation.

The original sentence is unclear and incomplete. It needs to be rewritten for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× He has absolutely Singing can bring a great sense of joy to people because it allows them to express their emotion.

✓ Absolutely, singing can bring a great sense of joy to people because it allows them to express their emotions.

'He has absolutely' is incorrect and unnecessary. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match 'their'.

× Anfield connect with others freely.

✓ And connect with others freely.

'Anfield' is a mishearing or typo; it should be 'and'. This is a conjunction, not a preposition, but the correction is necessary for meaning.

× An I also over the moon on the Black Pink concert.

✓ And I was also over the moon at the Black Pink concert.

The sentence lacks a verb and uses incorrect preposition. 'Over the moon' is an idiom meaning very happy, and it should be followed by 'at' to indicate the event.

× It's really enjoyed and interested in.

✓ I really enjoyed it and was very interested in it.

The original sentence lacks subject and verb agreement and proper tense. 'It's really enjoyed' is incorrect; it should be 'I really enjoyed it'.