唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to be more direct and avoid redundancy. For example, say: "Yes, I love singing because it helps me relieve stress. I have even recorded some songs with my brother, which was a fun experience."

範例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relieve stress. I have even recorded some songs with my brother, which was a fun experience.

建議: Your answer is confusing and lacks clear structure. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect ideas. For example: "Yes, I used to be part of a choir, but I had to leave. However, I hope to return to singing lessons to improve my skills."

範例: Yes, I used to be part of a choir, but I had to leave. However, I hope to return to singing lessons to improve my skills.

建議: Your answer is unclear and has many errors. Try to speak clearly and organize your ideas. For example: "I want to sing for my son, especially at bedtime. Although my voice is not very good now, I love singing and hope to improve so I can make him happy."

範例: I want to sing for my son, especially at bedtime. Although my voice is not very good now, I love singing and hope to improve so I can make him happy.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has many mistakes. Try to give clear examples and use linking words. For example: "Yes, singing can bring happiness. I have attended several concerts where musicians performed beautifully. For instance, at a concert last week, I enjoyed an opera singer's performance very much. I hope to experience more like that."

範例: Yes, singing can bring happiness. I have attended several concerts where musicians performed beautifully. For instance, at a concert last week, I enjoyed an opera singer's performance very much. I hope to experience more like that.

× Yes, I love singing, although I'm a good singer, but singing has a way of openly release stress.

✓ Yes, I love singing. Although I'm a good singer, singing has a way of openly releasing stress.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'although' and 'but' together, which is redundant. Also, 'release' should be in the '-ing' form after 'has a way of'. To improve, separate the ideas and use correct verb form after 'has a way of'. This makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I love singing, although I'm a good singer, but singing has a way of openly release stress.

✓ Yes, I love singing. Although I'm a good singer, singing has a way of openly releasing stress.

'Has a way of' is followed by a verb in the '-ing' form, so 'release' should be 'releasing'. This is a common pattern in English and helps the sentence flow correctly.

× I've recorded a few tracks with my brother in the past.

✓ I recorded a few tracks with my brother in the past.

'In the past' indicates a completed action, so simple past tense 'recorded' is more appropriate than present perfect 'have recorded'. This clarifies the time frame of the action.

× Yes, I was saying in the past the fact I should be part of the choir.

✓ Yes, I was saying in the past that I should be part of the choir.

The phrase 'the fact' is unnecessary and awkward here. Using 'that' to introduce the clause is clearer and grammatically correct. This improves sentence clarity and structure.

× But had to leave at some point.

✓ But I had to leave at some point.

The subject 'I' is missing before 'had to leave'. Including the subject is necessary for a complete sentence in past tense.

× I do have a chance to go back to learning how to sing and perfect my craft.

✓ I do have a chance to go back to learning how to sing and perfect my craft.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no modal verb error detected. 'Do have' is used for emphasis and is acceptable here.

× I would love to sing for my son, especially during bedtime. Unfortunately. How many good singer? And having very croaky voice.

✓ I would love to sing for my son, especially during bedtime. Unfortunately, I am not a good singer and have a very croaky voice.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Combining them into a complete sentence with proper subject and verb improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Singing has always been one thing I love to do and I believe one day out get at it and make him happy.

✓ Singing has always been one thing I love to do, and I believe one day I will get at it and make him happy.

The pronoun 'out' is incorrect here; it should be 'I will' to indicate future intention. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× I've been to several concepts.

✓ I've been to several concerts.

'Concepts' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'concerts' which means musical performances. This is a vocabulary error related to preposition usage.

× We had musicians.

✓ We had musicians performing.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'performing' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence structure.

× I really happy whenever they're seeing me.

✓ I am really happy whenever they see me.

The verb 'am' is missing, and 'they're seeing' should be simple present 'they see' to express habitual action. Also, 'really' should come before 'happy'.

× For example, our Like concert last week.

✓ For example, at our live concert last week.

The phrase is incomplete and 'Like' is likely a typo for 'live'. Adding 'at' and correcting the word makes the sentence complete and meaningful.

× And the musician was true height opera singing.

✓ And the musician was truly high in opera singing.

The phrase is awkward and unclear. 'True height' is incorrect; 'truly high' or 'at the height of' would be better. Rephrasing clarifies the intended meaning.

× I really want to experience that in person and I hope I would one day.

✓ I really want to experience that in person, and I hope I will one day.

The modal verb 'would' is incorrect here; 'will' is appropriate to express future hope. Adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.