唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is heartfelt and shows personal connection, but it has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'make some musics' should be 'make some music', and 'university's desk' is unclear. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and correct grammar to sound more natural.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it brings me great happiness. When I sing with my friends at university, it reminds me of those joyful times we spent together.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and has grammatical mistakes like 'I was started learning'. Also, avoid mentioning pauses in your answer. Try to give a clear timeline and use correct verb forms to improve clarity.

範例: Yes, I started learning to sing and play musical instruments when I was a child. Later, during university, I continued learning singing, which was very enjoyable.

建議: Your answer is good but can be more concise and natural. Avoid phrases like 'because it is me' and 'get entertained' which sound awkward. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Primarily, I like to sing for myself to enjoy the moment. Besides that, I often sing for my wife, my little boy, and sometimes for my friends and family.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and has awkward expressions like 'music is the food for life and love'. Try to complete your sentences and use clearer expressions to convey your thoughts effectively.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because music nourishes the soul and helps people feel more relaxed and joyful.

× I, together with my friends, used to make some musics and spend time together in my university's desk.

✓ I, together with my friends, used to make some music and spend time together at my university's desk.

The word 'music' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'musics'. Also, the preposition 'at' is more appropriate than 'in' when referring to a desk location.

× Yes, in my childhood I was started learning how to sing and how to play some musical instruments and after that there is a short pause.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I started learning how to sing and how to play some musical instruments, and after that there was a short pause.

The phrase 'was started learning' is incorrect; the correct past tense form is 'started learning'. Also, 'there is a short pause' should be in past tense 'there was a short pause' to maintain consistency.

× Well, primarily I would like to sing for myself because it is me.

✓ Well, primarily I would like to sing for myself because it is for me.

The phrase 'because it is me' is incorrect; it should be 'because it is for me' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× I also want to sing for my friends and families.

✓ I also want to sing for my friends and family.

The word 'family' is usually used as a singular collective noun; 'families' implies multiple separate families, which is less common in this context.

× I think music is some of the rare things that bring happiness to people because in my opinion music is the food for life and love, and it can make life easier and have.

✓ I think music is one of the rare things that bring happiness to people because, in my opinion, music is the food for life and love, and it can make life easier and happier.

The phrase 'some of the rare things' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the rare things' to refer to music as a singular noun. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and have' which is incomplete; it should be 'and happier' to complete the thought.