唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более связным и логичным. Избегайте повторений и неясных выражений, старайтесь использовать полные предложения и объяснять причины более чётко.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Singing is a hobby that brings me joy and allows me to connect with music and artists I admire.

建議: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Используйте связующие слова, чтобы сделать речь более плавной, и избегайте неясных фраз.

範例: I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I have tried to learn by watching some quiet singing guides on YouTube. However, I think formal training is not always necessary for enjoying singing.

建議: Ответ должен быть более чётким и связным. Используйте полные предложения и объясняйте свои мысли более подробно, избегая непонятных слов и выражений.

範例: Primarily, I sing for myself because it is my hobby. I also enjoy singing for my family and friends for fun. However, I do not want to sing publicly as it is not my goal.

建議: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова и объясняйте свои мысли более подробно и ясно.

範例: I strongly believe that singing can bring happiness to people. It can be a helpful way to express emotions and relieve stress, almost like a form of therapy.

× Yes, I like, I really, really like singing.

✓ Yes, I like singing, I really, really like it.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a proper object after 'like'. Adding 'singing' and 'it' clarifies the sentence and corrects the present tense usage.

× UM, because it helps me too.

✓ Um, because it helps me too.

The use of 'UM' in uppercase is informal and inconsistent. Changing it to 'Um' is more appropriate for spoken language transcription.

× It's like a hobby for me and I like feeling.

✓ It's like a hobby for me, and I like the feeling.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'the' before 'feeling' and connecting the clauses properly improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Uhm. In the same flaw within music, an artist.

✓ Uhm, I am interested in music and being an artist.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it to express the intended meaning improves sentence structure and clarity.

× Now I've never learned.

✓ No, I've never learned.

The word 'Now' is incorrect in this context; 'No' is appropriate to answer the question negatively. Also, 'learned' is correctly used in present perfect tense here.

× Uhm I tried like 2. Up to watch. Quiet guides up of singing in YouTube, but I would think uh, you don't need to. Like. Tish.

✓ Uhm, I tried watching some quiet singing guides on YouTube, but I think you don't need to.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reconstructing it into a coherent sentence improves understanding and grammatical correctness.

× I tried like 2.

✓ I tried watching two videos.

The phrase 'like 2' is informal and incomplete. Specifying 'two videos' and using past tense 'tried' correctly clarifies the sentence.

× Up to watch.

✓ I tried watching.

The phrase 'Up to watch' is incorrect. Using 'tried watching' is the correct verb + -ing form to express the attempt.

× Quiet guides up of singing in YouTube

✓ quiet singing guides on YouTube

The phrase 'guides up of singing in YouTube' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on' for platforms like YouTube, and 'singing guides' is the proper noun phrase.

× but I would think uh, you don't need to. Like. Tish.

✓ but I think you don't need to.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Simplifying it to a clear statement improves comprehension.

× First of all, I seen it for myself.

✓ First of all, I have seen it for myself.

The verb 'seen' requires an auxiliary verb 'have' to form the present perfect tense correctly.

× As a ceiling, I can sing for my.

✓ As a singer, I can sing for my

The word 'ceiling' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'singer' to describe a person who sings.

× And maybe for my friends As for fun.

✓ And maybe for my friends, as fun.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper punctuation. Adding a comma and adjusting the phrase improves clarity.

× And I don't want to sing for publish, it's not my.

✓ And I don't want to sing for public, it's not mine.

The phrase 'sing for publish' is incorrect; 'sing in public' or 'sing for the public' is correct. Also, 'it's not my' should be 'it's not mine'.

× 100% I'm.

✓ 100%, I am.

The phrase '100% I'm' is incomplete. Expanding 'I'm' to 'I am' completes the sentence.

× I really, really believe that singing it's can be like a.

✓ I really, really believe that singing can be like a

The phrase 'singing it's can be' is incorrect. Removing 'it's' corrects the sentence structure.

× A helpful treatment for some people because you like.

✓ a helpful treatment for some people because you like it.

The sentence is incomplete; adding 'it' completes the thought.

× Singing out your problems and you can.

✓ singing out your problems, and it can

The sentence is fragmented; adding a comma and 'it' connects the ideas properly.

× Is helps really really helps.

✓ It really, really helps.

The phrase 'Is helps really really helps' is incorrect. Correcting it to 'It really, really helps' is grammatically correct.