唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer has some good ideas but contains several language errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct vocabulary ('singing' instead of 'seeing' or 'saying') and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me to relax and forget my worries. Moreover, singing allows me to express emotions that I find difficult to put into words.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by providing more specific details and clearer explanations. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary related to singing techniques.

範例: Yes, I learnt singing techniques at primary school, such as keeping rhythm and singing in different octaves, which helped me improve my vocal control.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organise your ideas logically and use complete sentences. Avoid vague expressions and explain your feelings clearly. Also, keep your answer concise and relevant to the question.

範例: I would like to sing for my ex-boyfriend, even though it feels a bit embarrassing. I want to express the pain and frustration I felt during our breakup through my singing.

建議: Your answer is positive and relevant but could be improved by using more formal language and linking words. Avoid filler phrases like 'you know' and provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

範例: Definitely, singing upbeat music can bring happiness to people because it encourages them to sing along and dance, creating a joyful atmosphere.

× Yeah, I absolutely enjoy seeing because saying just always give me a feeling of shake everything off.

✓ Yeah, I absolutely enjoy singing because singing always gives me a feeling of shaking everything off.

The student incorrectly used 'seeing' and 'saying' instead of 'singing'. Also, 'singing' as a gerund is the correct form after 'enjoy'. The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. 'Shake' should be in the gerund form 'shaking' to follow 'a feeling of'.

× As well as I think seeing can help me express some emotions or feelings then I cannot articulate.

✓ As well as that, I think singing can help me express some emotions or feelings that I cannot articulate.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. The phrase 'then I cannot articulate' is incorrect; 'that I cannot articulate' is the correct relative clause. Also, 'As well as' should be followed by a noun or phrase; adding 'that' clarifies the sentence.

× Yeah, I have learned the same techniques in my primary school where I have learned how to do the beats and how to sing with the octave.

✓ Yeah, I learned the same techniques in my primary school where I learned how to do the beats and how to sing with the octave.

The present perfect 'have learned' is less appropriate here because the action is completed in the past at a specific time (primary school). Simple past 'learned' is more suitable. Also, repeating 'have learned' is redundant; simple past is better for both instances.

× How will I feel? A bit embarrassed to say it, a little bit petty.

✓ How will I feel? I will feel a bit embarrassed to say it, a little bit petty.

The original sentence fragments lack a subject and verb, making them incomplete sentences. Adding 'I will feel' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× And so I want to sing for my ex-boyfriend because I wanted him to know all the frustrations and agony he calls to me during the. Break up period and his.

✓ And so I want to sing for my ex-boyfriend because I wanted him to know all the frustrations and agony he caused me during the breakup period.

The phrase 'he calls to me' is incorrect; it should be 'he caused me' to express the effect of his actions. 'Break up' should be one word 'breakup'. The sentence was fragmented and unclear; the correction clarifies the meaning and corrects tense usage.

× Definitely. I sing upbeat music. You know, when people saying upbeat music, it can always bring people happiness.

✓ Definitely. I sing upbeat music. You know, when people sing upbeat music, it can always bring people happiness.

The phrase 'when people saying' is incorrect; it should be 'when people sing' to use the base verb form after 'when'. This corrects the verb form to match the subject and tense.