唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'more better'는 잘못된 표현이며, 'Carol Key'는 아마도 'karaoke'를 의미하는 것으로 보입니다. 또한, 문장이 길고 중복된 표현이 있어 간결하게 다듬을 필요가 있습니다. 좀 더 구체적인 이유와 경험을 덧붙여 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. For example, I often go to karaoke with my friends, and we have a great time singing together.

建議: 답변이 직접적이고 간결하지만, 'not much confident'는 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'not very confident' 또는 'not confident'로 수정하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 답변에 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간의 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: No, I haven't learned how to sing. Actually, I prefer listening to music rather than singing because I'm not very confident in my singing abilities.

建議: 'feel relax'는 문법적으로 틀렸으며 'feel relaxed'가 올바른 표현입니다. 또한, 답변에 연결어를 적절히 사용하여 문장 간의 논리적 흐름을 개선할 필요가 있습니다. 구체적인 상황이나 이유를 더 추가하면 좋습니다.

範例: Actually, I want to sing for my family because they always support me. Also, when I sing for them, I feel relaxed and happy.

建議: 답변에 문법적 오류가 많고 문장이 불완전합니다. 'The singing help'는 'Singing helps'로 수정해야 하며, 마지막 문장은 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 완성하고 구체적인 예시를 들어 답변을 명확하게 해야 합니다.

範例: Yes, of course. Singing helps people express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, many people enjoy singing in the shower or while driving, which makes them feel happier.

× I like singing because when I sing I feel more better and less stressed and I often go to Carol Key with my friends.

✓ I like singing because when I sing I feel better and less stressed and I often go to Carol Key with my friends.

The phrase 'more better' is incorrect because 'better' is already a comparative adjective and does not need 'more'. Using 'more' with 'better' is redundant. The correct form is simply 'better'.

× No, I haven't. I prefer listening to music more than singing and also I'm not much confident at my singing abilities.

✓ No, I haven't. I prefer listening to music more than singing and also I'm not very confident in my singing abilities.

The phrase 'not much confident' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'not very confident'. Also, the preposition 'at' should be 'in' when referring to abilities.

× Actually I want to sing for my family because they always support me and also when I sing for them I feel relax.

✓ Actually I want to sing for my family because they always support me and also when I sing for them I feel relaxed.

The word 'relax' is a verb, but here an adjective is needed to describe the feeling. The correct adjective form is 'relaxed'.

× The singing help express emotion and relieve stress.

✓ Singing helps express emotions and relieve stress.

The subject 'singing' is singular and requires the verb 'helps' (third person singular). Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the general meaning.

× Also, many people are. Singing at shower or car, film or better.

✓ Also, many people sing in the shower or car, at the film, or elsewhere.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Many people are. Singing' is incorrect sentence structure. It should be 'many people sing'. Prepositions 'in' or 'at' are needed before locations. 'Better' is unclear and replaced with 'elsewhere' to indicate other places.