唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be more grammatically correct and coherent. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid fragmented sentences. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for better flow.

範例: Yes, I like singing very much, but since I am introverted, I usually sing only in my personal room and not in front of others.

建議: Please focus on correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Also, clarify your ideas and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. I joined my coach's classes during vacations to improve my singing skills because I want to become better, although I don't plan to choose singing as my career.

建議: Work on sentence clarity and grammar, especially subject-verb agreement and word choice. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: I want to sing for my family because they support me a lot. They often encourage me to pursue a career in singing since I don't do very well in my studies. Singing makes me feel comfortable when I perform for my family and friends.

建議: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use appropriate linking words to explain your ideas logically. Also, try to use relevant vocabulary related to music and emotions.

範例: I believe singing can definitely bring happiness because it is a form of expression that touches the heart and conveys feelings. People can feel happy after listening to different kinds of music, such as hip hop or sad songs.

× Honestly I like singing very much but I am a introverted.

✓ Honestly I like singing very much but I am an introvert.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'introvert'. Also, 'introverted' is an adjective, but here a noun 'introvert' is appropriate.

× I does not sing in front of everyone.

✓ I do not sing in front of everyone.

The auxiliary verb 'does' is incorrect with the subject 'I'. The correct form is 'do' for first person singular.

× Mostly I singing in my personal room.

✓ Mostly I sing in my personal room.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used without an auxiliary verb. The simple present tense 'sing' is appropriate here.

× Yes I learn how to sing even I join my coaches classes in my vacations where I can improve my singing skills becauses I want to become extra water and I think I cannot choose career in my singing.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I joined my coach's classes during my vacations where I could improve my singing skills because I want to become an extra worker and I think I cannot choose a career in singing.

The verbs 'learn' and 'join' should be in past tense 'learned' and 'joined' to match the past time frame. 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'extra water' seems incorrect but kept as 'extra worker' assuming intended meaning. Articles 'a' and possessive 'coach's' are corrected.

× Yes I learn how to sing even I join my coaches classes in my vacations where I can improve my singing skills becauses I want to become extra water and I think I cannot choose career in my singing.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I joined my coach's classes during my vacations where I could improve my singing skills because I want to become an extra worker and I think I cannot choose a career in singing.

The preposition 'in' before 'my vacations' is incorrect; 'during' is appropriate. Also, 'choose career in my singing' should be 'choose a career in singing'.

× I want you sing for my family because my family sport me very much for singing and always they asked me to make a career in a singing becauses I am a not a very intelligent in our studies so I feel very comfort table when I singing for my family and my friends.

✓ I want to sing for my family because my family supports me very much for singing and they always ask me to make a career in singing because I am not very intelligent in our studies so I feel very comfortable when I sing for my family and my friends.

'I want you sing' should be 'I want to sing'. 'sport me' is incorrect; 'supports me' is correct. 'they asked' should be 'they ask' to match present tense. 'a singing' should be 'singing'. 'comfort table' is incorrect; 'comfortable' is correct. 'I singing' should be 'I sing'.

× According to male singing and bring absolutely happiness becauses or singing is a kind of speaking which can touch the heart and can understand the feelings when persons had he can he or she can become happy after listening the music.

✓ According to me, singing brings absolute happiness because singing is a kind of speech which can touch the heart and help understand feelings; when a person has it, he or she can become happy after listening to music.

'According to male' should be 'According to me'. 'singing and bring' should be 'singing brings' to agree with singular subject. 'absolutely happiness' should be 'absolute happiness'. 'or singing' should be 'singing'. 'kind of speaking' should be 'kind of speech'. 'can understand the feelings when persons had he can he or she can become happy' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'help understand feelings; when a person has it, he or she can become happy'. 'listening the music' should be 'listening to music'.

× According to male singing and bring absolutely happiness becauses or singing is a kind of speaking which can touch the heart and can understand the feelings when persons had he can he or she can become happy after listening the music.

✓ According to me, singing brings absolute happiness because singing is a kind of speech which can touch the heart and help understand feelings; when a person has it, he or she can become happy after listening to music.

The preposition 'after listening the music' is incorrect; it should be 'after listening to music'.