唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but lacks fluency and coherence. Try to combine your ideas into a single, clear sentence and avoid repetition. For example, instead of saying 'it helps me to stay calm and it helps me too,' you can say 'it helps me stay calm and feel relaxed.' Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me stay calm and feel relaxed, which reduces my stress after a long day.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use past tense consistently when talking about past experiences. Also, avoid unnecessary or confusing phrases. For example, you can say 'Yes, I learned singing in school when a music teacher used to give us lessons. He taught us the basics of music, which I still remember.'

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in school. Our music teacher used to give us lessons, and he taught us the basics of music, which I still remember.

建議: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and directly. For example, you can say 'I enjoy singing, but I usually don't sing for others because I lack confidence. I feel nervous when I sing in front of many people, so I avoid performing.'

範例: I enjoy singing, but I usually don't sing for others because I am not very confident. I feel nervous when I sing in front of many people, so I avoid performing.

建議: Your answer has good content but needs clearer expression and grammar correction. Try to use linking words and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say 'Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their feelings and emotions through songs.'

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their feelings and emotions through songs.

× Yes, I like singing because it helps me to stay calm and it helps me too. Feel relaxed and stress free.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it helps me to stay calm and feel relaxed and stress-free.

The original sentence has a sentence fragment 'Feel relaxed and stress free' which lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Combining it with the previous sentence using 'and' corrects the sentence structure and improves clarity.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, there was a period of a music teacher used to come and talk teach us a music lessons in it.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, there was a period when a music teacher used to come and teach us music lessons.

The phrase 'there was a period of a music teacher used to come and talk teach us a music lessons in it' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. Correcting it to 'there was a period when a music teacher used to come and teach us music lessons' clarifies the meaning and uses correct past tense and sentence structure.

× He gives all the knowledge of the music and it had us to keep in our mind and get to go.

✓ He gave us all the knowledge of music, and we had to keep it in our minds and remember it.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement errors and awkward phrasing. 'He gives' should be past tense 'He gave' to match the past context. 'It had us to keep' is incorrect; it should be 'we had to keep'. Also, 'knowledge of the music' is better as 'knowledge of music'. The correction improves agreement and clarity.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun after a preposition like 'for'. Using 'whom' instead of 'who' is grammatically correct in this context.

× I enjoy singing but I don't usually think for other because I'm not very confident.

✓ I enjoy singing, but I don't usually think about others because I'm not very confident.

The phrase 'think for other' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'about', and 'others' should be plural. Adding a comma before 'but' improves sentence flow.

× And I have whenever I sing.

✓ And I feel nervous whenever I sing.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'feel nervous' clarifies the intended meaning and completes the sentence structure.

× In between many peoples I fell 2 novels so I can't perform.

✓ Among many people, I feel nervous, so I can't perform.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'people' is 'people'. 'Fell 2 novels' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'feel nervous'. 'In between' is better replaced with 'among' when referring to multiple people. The correction addresses pluralization and word choice errors.

× Yes, I think I'm singing can bring happiness to people like they can express feelings or their emotions in the form of their songs are by singing.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because they can express their feelings or emotions through their songs.

The phrase 'I'm singing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. The sentence structure is awkward and contains unnecessary words like 'are by'. The correction simplifies and clarifies the sentence, fixing pronoun and sentence structure errors.