唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows your positive feelings about singing, but there are some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'a Cam' and 'when person is a low stress'. Try to use clear and correct expressions, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, you can say, 'I like singing because it helps me relax and reduces stress. It feels like a form of meditation for me.'

範例: I like singing because it helps me relax and reduces stress. It feels like a form of meditation for me, especially when I am feeling low. Singing lifts my mood and makes me feel calm and happy.

建議: Your answer gives relevant information but has some grammatical mistakes and redundancy, such as 'classical classical music classes' and 'I have a hope to learn the singing'. Try to use simple and correct sentences, and avoid repeating words. For example, you can say, 'Yes, I learned to sing when I was in 12th grade. I joined classical music classes because I wanted to improve my singing skills.'

範例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in 12th grade. I joined classical music classes because I wanted to improve my singing skills and learn proper techniques.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains errors like 'can't single' and 'for the too many people'. Also, try to explain your reason clearly and use linking words. For example, you can say, 'I want to sing for my family first because I have stage fear and feel uncomfortable singing in front of many people.'

範例: I want to sing for my family first because I have stage fear. Therefore, I feel more comfortable singing in front of them rather than a large audience.

建議: Your answer has a good idea but is unclear due to grammatical mistakes and confusing phrases like 'feel the said' and 'happened in their legs'. Try to express your thoughts clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, you can say, 'Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because when people listen to songs, they can forget their stress and feel better.'

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When someone listens to a song, it can help them forget their worries and feel more cheerful and relaxed.

× I like singing because it makes a person a Cam and a relaxing when person is a low stress.

✓ I like singing because it makes a person calm and relaxed when the person is under low stress.

The words 'Cam' and 'relaxing' are incorrectly used here. 'Cam' should be 'calm' (an adjective), and 'relaxing' (a present participle) should be replaced with 'relaxed' (an adjective) to describe the person's state. Also, 'a low stress' is incorrect; it should be 'under low stress' to express the condition properly.

× So yeah, it is helpful for the person and it'll.

✓ So yeah, it is helpful for the person and it works.

The phrase 'it'll' is incomplete and unclear here. It should be replaced with 'it works' to complete the sentence meaningfully. Also, 'the person' is acceptable but could be more natural as 'people' or 'a person' depending on context.

× I have learned how to sing when I'm in a 12 standard.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was in 12th standard.

The phrase 'a 12 standard' is incorrect. In Indian English, '12th standard' is used without an article. Also, 'I'm in' should be past tense 'I was in' to match the past action of learning.

× I have a hope to learn the singing so that's why I joined or music classes, classical classical music classes for that.

✓ I had a hope to learn singing, so that's why I joined music classes, classical music classes for that.

'I have a hope' is unnatural; 'I had a hope' fits better for past context. 'the singing' is incorrect; 'singing' without 'the' is correct. 'or music classes' seems a typo and should be 'music classes'. Repetition of 'classical' is unnecessary.

× Firstly, I want to sing for my family because I have a stage fear and also I can't single.

✓ Firstly, I want to sing for my family because I have stage fear and also I can't sing.

'a stage fear' should be 'stage fear' without 'a'. 'single' is a wrong word here; the correct verb is 'sing'.

× For the too many people.

✓ For too many people.

'For the too many people' is incorrect; the definite article 'the' should be removed before 'too many people'.

× Yeah, according to me singing can bring happiness to the people because if a person feel the said about something, so if the person hearing the song for some time then he forget about the any stress or anything whatever happened in their legs.

✓ Yeah, according to me, singing can bring happiness to people because if a person feels sad about something, and if the person listens to a song for some time, then he forgets about any stress or anything that happened in their life.

Several pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'a person feel' should be 'a person feels'; 'the said' should be 'sad'; 'the person hearing' should be 'the person listens'; 'he forget' should be 'he forgets'; 'the any stress' should be 'any stress'; 'whatever happened in their legs' is incorrect and should be 'that happened in their life'.