唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct expressions. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, instead of saying "I do be 'cause", say "Yes, I do because". Also, avoid incomplete or unclear words like "an which" and "And compelling". Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I do because singing helps me stay energetic and motivated. Moreover, it brings joy to others, making the environment more friendly and exciting.

建議: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Avoid repetition like "I have a I have learned". Use past tense correctly and provide specific details. Also, clarify unclear phrases such as "how now ice". Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: I learned how to sing when I was 10 years old. At first, I wasn't very good because of my voice, but I kept practicing. Additionally, my close friend gave me helpful pointers and feedback.

建議: Improve pronunciation and clarity, for example, "sync" should be "sing". Avoid incomplete sentences like "This allowed be cause" and "That's why I'm going to bring". Provide clear reasons and use linking words to connect ideas coherently.

範例: I would like to sing for my parents, especially my mother, because it brings her a lot of joy and happiness. For instance, my mother raised me to become a better person, so singing for her is very meaningful.

建議: Avoid short, fragmented sentences like "Which creates a friendly and exciting environment." Combine ideas into complete sentences and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, check spelling, e.g., "livley" should be "lively".

範例: Yes, absolutely. Singing can bring a lot of joy and happiness to people, which creates a friendly and exciting environment. Moreover, it helps to create a happy and lively atmosphere around the world.

× Yes, I do be 'cause it helps me stay energetic and motivated while I'm singing.

✓ Yes, I do because it helps me stay energetic and motivated while I'm singing.

The phrase 'do be' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'do' or 'because' without 'be'. The verb 'do' is an auxiliary verb and should not be followed by 'be' in this context. Replace 'do be' with 'do' or 'because' to correct the sentence.

× Also, singing brings joy to other people an which makes the environment more friendly and exciting.

✓ Also, singing brings joy to other people, which makes the environment more friendly and exciting.

The phrase 'an which' is incorrect; it should be 'which' preceded by a comma to connect the clauses properly. The pronoun 'which' refers to the previous clause and should not be preceded by 'an'.

× And compelling.

✓ It is also compelling.

The fragment 'And compelling.' is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. To correct it, add a subject and verb to form a complete sentence.

× I have a I have learned how to sing when I was 10 years old.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was 10 years old.

The present perfect tense 'have learned' is incorrectly used with a specific past time 'when I was 10 years old'. The simple past tense 'learned' is appropriate here.

× At the beginning I was really not good at singing because of my voice.

✓ At the beginning, I was really not good at singing because of my voice.

A comma is needed after the introductory phrase 'At the beginning' to improve sentence clarity and structure.

× I kept practicing and my close friend gave me pointers and feedback on how now ice.

✓ I kept practicing and my close friend gave me pointers and feedback on how to improve.

The phrase 'how now ice' is incorrect and unclear. It seems to be a typo or mishearing. Replacing it with 'how to improve' makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× I would like to sync for my parents, especially my mother.

✓ I would like to sing for my parents, especially my mother.

The word 'sync' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a pronoun error, but it affects sentence correctness.

× Uh. This allowed be cause.

✓ This is allowed because.

The phrase 'allowed be cause' is incorrect. Possibly intended 'allowed because' or 'this is allowed because'. Correcting to 'This is allowed because' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× It brings a lot of joy and hapiness to my mother.

✓ It brings a lot of joy and happiness to my mother.

The word 'hapiness' is a misspelling of 'happiness'. Correct spelling is necessary for proper adjective use.

× For instance, my mother raised me and how to become a better person.

✓ For instance, my mother raised me and taught me how to become a better person.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb after 'and'. Adding 'taught me' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× That's why I'm going to bring.

✓ That's why I'm going to bring joy to her.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'bring'. Adding 'joy to her' completes the thought.

× Singing can bring a lot of joy and happiness to people. Which creates a friendly and exciting environment.

✓ Singing can bring a lot of joy and happiness to people, which creates a friendly and exciting environment.

The second sentence starting with 'Which' is a fragment. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma to form a complex sentence.

× Moreover, it creates a happy and livley atmosphere. Around the world.

✓ Moreover, it creates a happy and lively atmosphere around the world.

The word 'livley' is misspelled; the correct spelling is 'lively'. Also, 'Around the world.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence.