唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but lacks fluency and natural phrasing. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your points with specific details.

範例: Yes, I like singing very much. I have been learning vocal techniques for about eight or nine years, so I consider myself quite experienced. Moreover, I have performed in several concerts in my city, which has helped me gain confidence.

建議: Your answer is fragmented and lacks coherence. Use complete sentences and linking words to make your response clear and logical. Provide more specific details about your learning experience and achievements.

範例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing for nine years. During this time, I have performed in many concerts in my city and received several trophies for my performances.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas in full sentences and explain your thoughts clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Sometimes I think about becoming a popular singer. I would like to sing for many people, especially for my country, to share my culture and music with them.

建議: Your answer is quite good but can be improved by using smoother transitions and more natural expressions. Try to avoid short, choppy sentences and connect your ideas with linking words.

範例: I believe it depends on the individual. For some people, dancing might bring happiness, but for me, singing definitely does. It helps me relax and forget about my problems and stress.

× I learned vocal about.

✓ I learned about vocals.

The phrase 'learned vocal about' is incorrect in word order and usage. The correct phrase is 'learned about vocals' to indicate the subject studied. The verb 'learned' is correctly in past tense, but the object phrase needs correction.

× Eight or nine years I can say I'm kinda.

✓ I can say I've been doing it for eight or nine years.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and incomplete structure. The corrected sentence properly expresses duration and experience using present perfect continuous tense.

× Experienced in that.

✓ I am experienced in that.

The original sentence is a fragment missing a subject and verb. Adding 'I am' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× I also performed in some concerts in my city.

✓ I also performed in some concerts in my city.

This sentence is correct in past tense and structure; no correction needed.

× Yes, as I already mentioned it.

✓ Yes, as I already mentioned.

The verb 'mentioned' is correctly in past tense. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and can be omitted for clarity.

× I learn.

✓ I have learned vocals for nine years.

The verb 'learn' in present tense is incorrect here; the action started in the past and continues, so present perfect tense 'have learned' is appropriate.

× Vocal.

✓ vocals.

The word 'Vocal' alone is incomplete; it should be 'vocals' as the object of learning.

× Nine years.

✓ for nine years.

The phrase 'Nine years' is incomplete; adding 'for' indicates duration properly.

× I performed in a lot of concerts in my city.

✓ I have performed in a lot of concerts in my city.

Using present perfect 'have performed' is better to indicate experience up to now.

× I get a lot of. Good. Trophy.

✓ I have received a lot of good trophies.

'Trophy' should be plural 'trophies' to match 'a lot of'. Also, 'get' should be past perfect 'have received' to indicate past achievements.

× Sometimes I solved about being an popular singer so.

✓ Sometimes I think about being a popular singer.

The verb 'solved' is incorrect here; 'think about' is appropriate. Also, 'an popular' should be 'a popular' due to vowel sound rules.

× an popular singer

✓ a popular singer

The article 'an' is used before vowel sounds; 'popular' starts with a consonant sound, so 'a' is correct.

× Of course, for a lot of people.

✓ Of course, I want to sing for a lot of people.

The original sentence is a fragment; adding subject and verb completes the thought.

× First of all for my country. Plates.

✓ First of all, for my country, the people.

'Plates' is incorrect; likely meant 'people'. Also, sentence fragments need to be combined properly.

× I think it's individual.

✓ I think it's individual for everyone.

Adding 'for everyone' clarifies the meaning; 'individual' alone is vague.

× For someone it could be. Dancing.

✓ For someone, it could be dancing.

The sentence is fragmented; combining into one sentence improves clarity.

× But for me, yes, it's definitely is.

✓ But for me, yes, it definitely is.

The phrase 'it's definitely is' is redundant; 'it definitely is' is correct.

× It helps me to relax, it helps me to forget about all of my problems, about my stress.

✓ It helps me relax and forget all my problems and stress.

Combining sentences and removing unnecessary prepositions improves fluency and clarity.