唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid grammatical errors like 'becauses' and 'fells out'. Try to keep your answer concise, up to 5 sentences, and directly answer the question with supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions. When I sing, I feel relaxed and happy. Moreover, singing allows me to connect with my feelings and relieve stress.

建議: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Focus on giving a direct response with clear sentences. Use simple and correct grammar, and avoid unnecessary or confusing words. Try to structure your answer with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child. My school invited a guest teacher who taught us singing. I also participated in a singing competition during that time.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Avoid unclear phrases like 'support me in Everest and situation'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and keep sentences concise and relevant. Try to express your feelings and reasons clearly.

範例: I like to sing for my family because they always support me in difficult times. Singing for them makes me feel happy, relaxed, and calm. In the future, I hope to continue singing as a hobby and a source of joy.

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Avoid grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'singer Holik person' and 'massive Surma song is a high on missing'. Use linking words to explain your opinion with specific examples in a logical way.

範例: I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, when I sing at parties or events, I feel joyful. Also, I often sing in my car on the way to work, which lifts my mood and makes me feel positive.

× Hi. Of course I love singing becauses singing fells out our emotion and expression and when I you singing a song I feel very relaxed and I feel happy.

✓ Hi. Of course I love singing because singing helps to express our emotions and expressions, and when I sing a song I feel very relaxed and happy.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. 'Fells out' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'helps to express'. The phrase 'when I you singing a song' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'when I sing a song'. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context. The conjunction 'and' is used correctly here to connect ideas.

× But remember, I ever learned how to sing in my childhood in my seniors can re school messages countries could upgrade our organization for a renewal guest teacher at that time I also participate participate in this competition and that time I also sing a song.

✓ But I remember, I learned how to sing in my childhood. My seniors in school could upgrade our organization with a new guest teacher. At that time, I also participated in this competition and sang a song.

The sentence has multiple issues. 'Ever learned' is incorrect; 'learned' suffices. The phrase 'participate participate' is a repetition and should be 'participated' in past tense. 'Sing a song' should be 'sang a song' to match past tense. The sentence structure is confusing and needs to be broken into clearer sentences. The phrase 'can re school messages countries could upgrade our organization for a renewal guest teacher' is unclear and likely a transcription error; it has been interpreted as 'My seniors in school could upgrade our organization with a new guest teacher' for clarity.

× Actually ma'am, I sing a song for my family because it also support me in Everest and situation and stand up in my every situation.

✓ Actually ma'am, I sing songs for my family because they also support me in every situation and stand by me.

The phrase 'sing a song for my family' is better as 'sing songs for my family' to indicate habitual action. 'Support me in Everest and situation' is incorrect; likely intended 'in every situation'. 'Stand up in my every situation' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'stand by me in every situation'. Prepositions 'in' and 'by' are used correctly in the correction.

× And when I sing a song in my family, I feel very happy and relaxed and calm.

✓ And when I sing songs with my family, I feel very happy, relaxed, and calm.

The phrase 'sing a song in my family' is awkward; 'sing songs with my family' is more natural. The adjectives 'happy', 'relaxed', and 'calm' should be separated by commas for clarity. The pronoun usage is corrected to better fit the context.

× And in the future it's my hobby and it's my pleasure. I do to my pleasure to work and take good.

✓ And in the future, it will remain my hobby and my pleasure. I will do it with pleasure and perform well.

The sentence has unclear pronoun references and awkward phrasing. 'I do to my pleasure to work and take good' is incorrect. It is corrected to 'I will do it with pleasure and perform well' to convey intended meaning. Future tense is used to match 'in the future' context.

× According to my perspective, I think singing and bring to happiness to people.

✓ From my perspective, I think singing brings happiness to people.

The phrase 'According to my perspective' is better expressed as 'From my perspective'. 'Singing and bring to happiness' is incorrect; it should be 'singing brings happiness'. The preposition 'to' after 'bring' is unnecessary here.

× When I singing a song in my like a party and any organization, I feel very happy and for example, I am a singer Holik person and I also singing a song in my car when I go to my work and I also usually singing a massive Surma song is a high on missing.

✓ When I sing a song at parties or any organization, I feel very happy. For example, I am a singing hobbyist and I also sing songs in my car when I go to work. I usually sing popular songs that I like.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used instead of 'sing' in present tense. 'In my like a party and any organization' is incorrect; corrected to 'at parties or any organization'. 'Singer Holik person' is unclear; interpreted as 'singing hobbyist'. The phrase 'massive Surma song is a high on missing' is unclear; interpreted as 'popular songs that I like'. Present tense verbs are corrected to match the habitual action context.