唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like "I like to do singing" multiple times. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax during my spare time."

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax during my spare time and clears my mind.

建議: Focus on clarity and structure. Use correct verb tenses and avoid unclear phrases like "minor grandparents" or "there wise are too much heart searching." Also, try to link your ideas logically and be specific about how you learned singing.

範例: Yes, when I was a child, I learned to sing by watching TV shows and listening to my grandparents, who have beautiful voices. I enjoyed spending time with them and practicing their songs.

建議: Answer the question directly by stating who you want to sing for. Avoid repeating phrases and unclear sentences. Use a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words.

範例: I would like to sing for my family and friends because sharing music with them brings me joy and strengthens our bond.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using linking words and correct grammar. Explain your ideas with specific reasons and avoid vague phrases like "I prefer the people like to do singing."

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because when people feel sad, listening to or singing songs helps them relax and feel comforted.

× Yes, I like singing because in my spare time I like to do singing and it makes my mind relax and come, so that's why I like to do singing.

✓ Yes, I like singing because in my spare time I like singing and it makes my mind relax and calm, so that's why I like singing.

The phrase 'like to do singing' is awkward and incorrect. 'Like singing' or 'like to sing' are correct forms. Also, 'come' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'calm' to express relaxation.

× Yes, in my childhood I learn singing from the TV shows and some of the singing from minor grandparents because my grandparents are very voiceful like uh, there wise are too much heart searching.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I learned singing from TV shows and some singing from my grandparents because my grandparents have very expressive voices; their voices are very heartfelt.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past time frame. 'Minor grandparents' is unclear; 'my grandparents' is appropriate. 'There wise' is incorrect; it should be 'their voices'. 'Too much heart searching' is awkward; 'very heartfelt' is clearer.

× So I really like to learn their voice in my spare time.

✓ So I really like to learn their songs in my spare time.

'Learn their voice' is incorrect because one cannot learn a voice; one learns songs or singing techniques. The pronoun 'their' is correct but the object needs correction.

× So I like to spend a lot of time with them. Yeah.

✓ So I like spending a lot of time with them. Yeah.

Both 'like to spend' and 'like spending' are acceptable, but 'like spending' fits better with the continuous action implied here.

× Yeah, I want to learn singing in my future because if I have opportunity to learn singing, so obviously I'd prefer to learn singing because it's my. It's it's my experience to learn that.

✓ Yeah, I want to learn singing in the future because if I have the opportunity to learn singing, I would obviously prefer to learn it because it's my experience to do so.

'In my future' should be 'in the future'. 'If I have opportunity' needs the article 'the'. 'So obviously I'd prefer' is redundant; 'I would obviously prefer' is sufficient. The sentence was fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, of course singing can bring people happiness be 'cause some of the peoples when they are used feel very bad.

✓ Yes, of course singing can bring people happiness because some people, when they feel very bad,

'Peoples' is incorrect; 'people' is the correct plural noun. 'When they are used feel very bad' is ungrammatical; it should be 'when they feel very bad'.

× So they like to learn, so they like to listen sad songs and it makes their mind more, it makes their mind more relax and just a console.

✓ So they like to listen to sad songs and it makes their minds more relaxed and provides consolation.

'Like to learn' is unclear and unnecessary here. 'Listen sad songs' should be 'listen to sad songs'. 'Makes their mind more relax' is incorrect; it should be 'makes their minds more relaxed'. 'Just a console' is incorrect; 'provides consolation' is appropriate.

× I prefer the people like to do singing.

✓ I prefer people who like to sing.

'The people like to do singing' is incorrect. It should be 'people who like to sing' to correctly use the relative clause and verb form.