唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但存在语法错误和用词不当，如“seeing”应为“singing”，句子结构不够清晰。建议注意动词形式和句子连贯性，避免重复和语法错误。

範例: Yes, I am a big fan of singing because it helps me relieve stress and express my emotions. It's my way to recharge and feel happier.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“talk saying listens”不符合语法，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意时态和主谓一致。

範例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was young. I was part of the school choir, and we practiced together and took part in competitions.

建議: 回答表达了想为家人和朋友唱歌的原因，但存在语法错误和重复，如“pursuing me”应为“pursue me”，句子不够流畅。建议简化句子，注意动词形式和逻辑连贯。

範例: I want to sing for my family and close friends because they support and appreciate me. Their encouragement helps me perform better.

建議: 回答中有词汇错误，如“Seeing Kim”应为“Singing can”，句子结构不完整且表达不清。建议注意词汇拼写和句子完整性，使用具体例子时要表达清楚。

範例: Yes, I definitely believe singing can bring happiness because it strengthens bonds and builds connections. For example, when people sing together during celebrations, they feel touched and joyful.

× Yes I am big fan of seeing because it can help me relieve my stress and also I have I'm afraid to express my emotions.

✓ Yes, I am a big fan of singing because it can help me relieve my stress and also I am afraid to express my emotions.

这里缺少冠词“a”，因为“fan”是可数名词，单数形式前需要加冠词。并且“seeing”应为“singing”，是拼写错误。

× Yes I am big fan of seeing because it can help me relieve my stress and also I have I'm afraid to express my emotions.

✓ Yes, I am a big fan of singing because it can help me relieve my stress and also I am afraid to express my emotions.

句中“I have I'm afraid”结构错误，应为“I am afraid”，正确使用动词和代词。

× Yes, I talk saying listens.

✓ Yes, I took singing lessons.

原句中“talk saying listens”是错误的表达，应为“took singing lessons”，表示过去接受过唱歌课程。

× When I was young and was also part of the school choir, we practice together and even participated in the school competitions.

✓ When I was young, I was also part of the school choir. We practiced together and even participated in school competitions.

“practice”应使用过去式“practiced”，因为描述的是过去的动作。

× When I was young and was also part of the school choir, we practice together and even participated in the school competitions.

✓ When I was young, I was also part of the school choir. We practiced together and even participated in school competitions.

“the school competitions”中“the”不必要，且“competitions”复数形式正确。

× I want to sing for my family and my close friends because they are very supportive and appreciate my efforts which make me to perform better.

✓ I want to sing for my family and my close friends because they are very supportive and appreciate my efforts, which make me perform better.

“make me to perform”中“to”不应出现，动词“make”后接动词原形。

× They always encourage me and pursuing me too. Pursue me they always.

✓ They always encourage me and pursue me too.

“pursuing me”应改为动词原形“pursue me”，且“Pursue me they always”语序错误，应合并为一句。

× Yes, I definitely believe. Seeing Kim bring happiness to people because it can strengthen the bonds and the even build connections with others.

✓ Yes, I definitely believe singing can bring happiness to people because it can strengthen bonds and even build connections with others.

“Seeing Kim”应为“singing”，且“the bonds”中“the”不必要，且“the even”语序错误。

× For example when people sing group like celebrating for best day, they are very touched and moved.

✓ For example, when people sing in groups like celebrating their best day, they are very touched and moved.

“sing group”应为“sing in groups”，且“best day”前应加物主代词“their”。