唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid unnecessary repetition, and organize your ideas logically. Also, avoid confusing statements like "which is like singing, but it's not singing."

範例: Yes, I love singing because it makes me feel happy and energized. For example, when I recite the Koran, it feels similar to singing as I use different pitches and sounds, which brings me joy.

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Make sure to use correct verb tenses and complete sentences. Also, avoid unclear phrases like "I was able to lie." Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing in several ways. For months, I used the Singer Studio app to practice, and I also took lessons from an Operon recitation teacher for a year. These experiences helped me improve my singing skills.

建議: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Try to form complete sentences and directly answer the question. Explain your reasons clearly and avoid incomplete thoughts. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I prefer to recite the Koran instead of singing because it is a deeply spiritual experience for me. I like to recite it for my Lord and also for my own peace and reflection.

建議: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but ends abruptly. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, provide specific examples to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because a cheerful melody can uplift the listener's mood. Moreover, singing also benefits the singer by creating positive vibrations. For instance, I often sing in the shower or while driving, which makes me feel joyful.

× Especially when I'm reciting Koran, which is like singing, but it's not singing, but you're still.

✓ Especially when I'm reciting the Koran, which is like singing, but it's not singing; you are still activating all the pitches, all the sounds, and breath.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear, lacking proper conjunctions and punctuation. It also misses the definite article 'the' before 'Koran'. The correction combines the ideas into a coherent sentence, clarifies the meaning, and corrects article usage.

× Especially when I'm reciting Koran, which is like singing, but it's not singing, but you're still.

✓ Especially when I'm reciting the Koran, which is like singing, but it's not singing; you are still activating all the pitches, all the sounds, and breath.

The word 'Koran' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific text. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× I have downloaded the app Singer Studio and went through their lessons for months.

✓ I have downloaded the app Singer Studio and have gone through their lessons for months.

When using the present perfect tense ('have downloaded'), the second verb should also be in the present perfect form ('have gone') to maintain parallel structure. Using 'went' (simple past) breaks this parallelism.

× Additionally, I have taken on Operon recitation teacher who taught me for about a full year and.

✓ Additionally, I have taken on an Operon recitation teacher who taught me for about a full year.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an article before 'Operon recitation teacher'. The conjunction 'and' at the end is unnecessary and creates a fragment. The correction completes the sentence and adds the article 'an'.

× With those two combined, I was able to lie.

✓ With those two combined, I was able to learn.

The word 'lie' is incorrect in this context; it seems to be a typo or misuse. The intended meaning is likely 'learn'. Correcting this word clarifies the sentence.

× Since I have substituted singing with recitation of the Horan, which is a highly spiritual experience for me.

✓ Since I have substituted singing with recitation of the Koran, which is a highly spiritual experience for me,

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. Also, 'Horan' is a misspelling of 'Koran'. The sentence needs to be connected to the following sentence or completed to form a full sentence.

× I love to. Recite Koran for a la sabana Tala. Who's my Lord?

✓ I love to recite the Koran for Allah, who is my Lord.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain misspellings ('a la sabana Tala' should be 'Allah'). The correction combines the fragments into a coherent sentence and corrects spelling and article usage.

× I love to. Recite Koran for a la sabana Tala. Who's my Lord?

✓ I love to recite the Koran for Allah, who is my Lord.

The word 'Koran' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific text. Also, 'Allah' is a proper noun and should be spelled correctly.

× Additionally, I would like to recite the Koran for myself because.

✓ Additionally, I would like to recite the Koran for myself because it brings me peace.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'because'. Adding a reason completes the sentence and clarifies the thought.

× I think it depends on the tune.

✓ I think it depends on the tune.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× If you have a happy melodious tune, it will certainly bring happiness to the listener, but more joy through the vibration and frequency of singing to the singer.

✓ If you have a happy, melodious tune, it will certainly bring happiness to the listener, but it brings even more joy to the singer through the vibration and frequency of singing.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Adding a comma between 'happy' and 'melodious' improves adjective order. Clarifying the second clause improves readability and meaning.

× I find myself singing in the shower, I find myself singing while driving and.

✓ I find myself singing in the shower and while driving.

The original sentence is a comma splice and ends abruptly with 'and'. The correction combines the ideas into a single, complete sentence.