唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but there are several grammatical errors and unclear phrases that affect clarity. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and coherent by linking ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it lifts my mood and refreshes my mind when I feel lonely or free. It is both entertaining and relaxing, which makes me feel happier.

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Also, organise your answer logically with linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I learnt how to sing when I was young because my grandma was still alive and active then. She took the opportunity to teach me various traditional songs, which helped me develop my singing skills.

建議: Your answer is heartfelt but quite confusing due to grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: I enjoy singing for my eight-year-old son, especially when he is tired or feeling down. Singing seems to lift his spirits and makes him more energetic, which makes me very happy.

建議: Your answer attempts to explain the benefits of singing but is unclear and contains many errors. Focus on clear sentence structure, correct grammar, and relevant vocabulary. Use linking words to make your answer logical and coherent.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings joy and happiness to many people because it is a popular form of entertainment. Different types of songs can uplift moods and create a positive atmosphere.

× An when I'm free or when I feel solo, singing raises my mood and also uplift my spirit.

✓ And when I'm free or when I feel solo, singing raises my mood and also uplifts my spirit.

The sentence starts with 'An' which is a typo and should be 'And'. Also, 'uplift' should be 'uplifts' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. The conjunction 'and' is used to connect two clauses, so it must be spelled correctly.

× singing raises my mood and also uplift my spirit.

✓ singing raises my mood and also uplifts my spirit.

The verb 'uplift' must be in the third person singular form 'uplifts' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. This is a subject-verb agreement rule in English.

× That's the more reason error like singing and I relaxing also because it's entertaining, it's refreshing.

✓ That's the main reason I like singing and relaxing also because it's entertaining and refreshing.

The phrase 'more reason error like singing' is incorrect. It should be 'main reason I like singing'. Also, 'I relaxing' is incorrect; it should be 'I like relaxing' or 'and relaxing'. The conjunction 'and' should connect the two activities. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper pronoun and verb usage.

× Yeah, I learn how to sing when I was young because this is the moment where my my grandma was still alive and my grandma was active.

✓ Yeah, I learned how to sing when I was young because that was the time when my grandma was still alive and active.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past time frame 'when I was young'. Also, 'this is the moment' should be 'that was the time' to maintain past tense consistency.

× So I used this operate.

✓ So I used this opportunity.

The word 'operate' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'opportunity'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but it affects sentence clarity.

× She used that opportunity to teach me different types of traditional song.

✓ She used that opportunity to teach me different types of traditional songs.

The noun 'song' should be plural 'songs' because it refers to multiple types. This is a singular and plural issue.

× And that's when I learned singing, singing end.

✓ And that's when I learned to sing.

The phrase 'learned singing, singing end' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correct structure is 'learned to sing' to express acquiring the skill.

× the person I like singing, I enjoy singing for is my son and my 8 year old boy son right when I when is tired or when is so low when I say when I say for him it lift up is period and they go become so active and it's really enjoyable.

✓ The person I enjoy singing for is my son, my 8-year-old boy. When he is tired or feeling low, singing for him lifts up his spirit and he becomes more active. It's really enjoyable.

The original sentence has multiple pronoun errors such as 'when I when is tired' instead of 'when he is tired', and 'lift up is period' instead of 'lifts up his spirit'. Also, 'they go become' should be 'he becomes' to agree with singular subject. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× when I say for him it lift up is period

✓ when I sing for him it lifts up his spirit

The verb 'lift' should be 'lifts' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'is period' is incorrect and should be 'his spirit' to convey the intended meaning.

× Singing bring joy and happiness to most people because it's a new form of an entertainment, so most people fail more entertained with different types of song.

✓ Singing brings joy and happiness to most people because it's a new form of entertainment, so most people feel more entertained with different types of songs.

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'Singing'. 'An entertainment' is incorrect; 'entertainment' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Fail' should be 'feel'. 'Song' should be plural 'songs' because it refers to multiple types.

× so most people fail more entertained with different types of song.

✓ so most people feel more entertained by different types of songs.

The verb 'feel entertained' is usually followed by the preposition 'by' to indicate the cause. Also, 'fail' is a typo for 'feel'.

× So that's where you realize that singing and it's an important aid.

✓ So that's where you realize that singing is an important aid.

The phrase 'singing and it's an important aid' is ungrammatical. It should be 'singing is an important aid' to form a correct sentence.

× I train charge traditionally singing as its own important.

✓ I think traditional singing is important on its own.

The phrase 'I train charge traditionally singing as its own important' is unclear and ungrammatical. It should be 'I think traditional singing is important on its own' to express the intended meaning clearly.