唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“seeing”应为“singing”，影响了表达的自然性和准确性。建议注意单词拼写和语法结构，保持句子简洁且逻辑清晰。

範例: Yes, definitely. I love singing because it allows me to express my emotions and feel confident. I often imagine myself performing on stage in front of a large audience with bright lights, which is a dream of mine.

建議: 回答中语法混乱且表达不清晰，影响理解。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并注意单词拼写和语法正确。

範例: Not really. I have never learned to sing professionally because I consider it more of a hobby. I don't want to make singing my major at university since I prefer to keep it as a fun activity rather than a serious career.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“seeing”应为“singing”，且句子结构不够清晰。建议使用连贯的句子表达观点，并注意词汇的准确使用。

範例: Well, I have never really thought about this question before, but if I had to choose, I would sing for myself. Singing is a way for me to express my feelings and dreams. Actually, I want to become a pop star one day, so singing for myself would be a step toward that goal.

建議: 回答表达了观点并给出了例子，但存在用词错误，如“thing”和“seeing”应为“singing”。建议注意词汇准确性，并适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Yes, I definitely believe that singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions freely. For example, when people sing happy songs, they often feel more joyful and relaxed. Moreover, singing can also help release stress.

× I love seeing because it allows me to express my emotions and feel confident will when I was thinking.

✓ I love singing because it allows me to express my emotions and feel confident when I am thinking.

这里'seeing'应为动名词形式'singing'，表示喜欢唱歌。'will when I was thinking'结构错误，应改为'when I am thinking'，表示现在进行时。

× which is a dream for my.

✓ which is a dream for me.

'my'是形容词性物主代词，不能单独作宾语，应该用宾格代词'me'。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'learnt'是英式英语过去式，'learned'是美式英语过去式，两者均可，但为了统一风格，建议使用'learned'。

× I have never learned to the same professionally because I consider it moral of hobby.

✓ I have never learned to sing professionally because I consider it more of a hobby.

'to the same'无意义，应改为'to sing'。'moral'应为'more of'，表示'更像是'。

× I don't want you make seeing my major.

✓ I don't want to make singing my major.

'you make seeing'结构错误，应为不定式'to make singing'。

× I don't even university and since I prefer to keep it was an and fun activity rather than a serious carrier.

✓ I don't even attend university and since I prefer to keep it as a fun activity rather than a serious career.

句子结构混乱，'I don't even university'缺少动词，应补充'attend'。'keep it was an and fun activity'应为'keep it as a fun activity'。'carrier'拼写错误，应为'career'。

× Well I have never really thought about this questions before but if I had to choose I would think for myself.

✓ Well, I have never really thought about this question before, but if I had to choose, I would think for myself.

'questions'应为单数形式'question'，因为前面用的是'this'。

× Singing is a way for me to express my feeling and dreams an actually I want to become a pop star one day so seeing for myself would be a step toward.

✓ Singing is a way for me to express my feelings and dreams and actually I want to become a pop star one day so singing for myself would be a step forward.

'feeling'应为复数'feelings'。'an'应为'and'。'seeing'应为'singing'。'step toward'应为'step forward'。

× Yes, I definitely believe that thing can bring happiness to people because it allows people to express their emotions freely.

✓ Yes, I definitely believe that singing can bring happiness to people because it allows people to express their emotions freely.

'thing'不明确，应改为'singing'，指代唱歌。

× For example, when people sing happy songs, they often feel more joyful and relaxed, and seeing can also help release stress.

✓ For example, when people sing happy songs, they often feel more joyful and relaxed, and singing can also help release stress.

'seeing'应为'singing'，保持前文一致，指唱歌。