唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer has many grammatical errors and unclear phrases which affect naturalness and clarity. Try to give a direct answer first, then add a clear reason using simple linking words like 'because'. Avoid repeating questions back to the examiner. Use correct verb forms and sentence structure.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and feel peaceful whenever I am tired.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Start with a direct answer, then add supporting details using linking words like 'but' or 'however'. Avoid asking questions back to the examiner. Use correct verb tenses and sentence structure.

範例: No, I have never had the chance to learn how to sing, but I often sing along to music in my room when I feel tired.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical errors. Give a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect verb forms.

範例: I want to sing for my mom because I love her and she has done a lot for me, so singing is my way to show appreciation.

建議: Your answer has unclear and incorrect phrases. Give a direct answer first, then explain with clear reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Use simple and correct vocabulary relevant to the topic.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because people have a lot of work and need entertainment to relax their minds.

× Yes, eyes like singing because it keeps my mind relax and come Ann I feel whenever I feel exhausted.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it keeps my mind relaxed and calm whenever I feel exhausted.

The pronoun 'eyes' is incorrect and should be 'I'. Also, 'relax' should be 'relaxed' to correctly describe the state of the mind, and 'come Ann I feel' is a mishearing or typo for 'calm'. The sentence needs proper pronouns and adjectives to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Are you really sing a song to keep me relaxed and peaceful?

✓ I really sing a song to keep myself relaxed and peaceful.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Are you' instead of 'I' and 'me' instead of 'myself'. The subject should be 'I' as the speaker is talking about their own action, and the reflexive pronoun 'myself' is needed to refer back to the subject.

× No, I have never chance in my life to learn how to sing.

✓ No, I have never had the chance in my life to learn how to sing.

The verb 'have' is missing in the perfect tense construction. 'Have never chance' is incorrect; it should be 'have never had the chance' to correctly express the experience in the present perfect tense.

× Are you really sing a song?

✓ I really sing a song.

The question 'Are you really sing a song?' is incorrect. It should be a statement 'I really sing a song.' The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here as the speaker is talking about themselves.

× I play music and began to sing a song.

✓ I play music and begin to sing a song.

The verb 'began' is past tense, but the sentence is in present tense ('I play'). To maintain tense consistency, 'began' should be 'begin'.

× I want to sing a song for my mom because I love her and she admired me and she do a lot of things in my life and that's why I prefer to sing a song for her for it might hurt link her for her work.

✓ I want to sing a song for my mom because I love her and she admires me and she does a lot of things for me in my life. That's why I prefer to sing a song for her because it might hurt her for her work.

The pronouns and verbs are incorrectly used: 'she admired' should be 'she admires' (present tense), 'she do' should be 'she does', and 'for it might hurt link her for her work' is unclear and likely meant to be 'because it might hurt her because of her work'. The sentence needs correction for pronoun use and verb agreement.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to the people lives because there are a lot of workload and they're not an enough entertainment source for them.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people's lives because there is a lot of workload and there is not enough entertainment for them.

'The people lives' should be 'people's lives' to show possession. 'There are a lot of workload' is incorrect because 'workload' is uncountable and singular, so 'there is a lot of workload' is correct. 'They're not an enough entertainment source' should be 'there is not enough entertainment'.

× That's why training can have to bring a key. Uh, Mickey makes their mind relax.

✓ That's why training can bring a key. Uh, music makes their minds relax.

'Training' is likely a mishearing of 'singing' or 'music'. 'Have to bring a key' is incorrect; it should be 'can bring a key' or better 'can bring happiness'. 'Mickey' is a mishearing of 'music'. 'Their mind' should be 'their minds' to agree with plural 'people'. The sentence needs correction for word choice and pronoun agreement.