唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then explain your feelings about singing in public and alone. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'public figure' and 'sync properly'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like singing, but only when I'm alone because I feel nervous singing in front of others. I worry that I might sing out of tune and people could judge me. Therefore, I prefer to sing privately where I can enjoy it without any pressure.

建議: Focus on giving a clear and concise answer. Correct grammar mistakes and use appropriate vocabulary, for example, 'vocal techniques' instead of 'voice nodes'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I have watched many videos about vocal techniques, like how to control pitch and tone. A friend of mine is a singer who performs in bars and often encourages me to sing with him, but I feel too shy to sing in public.

建議: Try to organise your answer more clearly. Use complete sentences and avoid informal contractions. Explain your feelings with specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: If I were to sing, I would sing for my girlfriend because I love her deeply. Although my singing might not be technically perfect, it would come from the heart and express my emotions. I believe she would appreciate it, even if others might not.

建議: Improve clarity by correcting grammar and word choice, for example, 'reduce stress' instead of 'reduce a lot of stress' and 'people's lives' instead of 'people live'. Provide specific examples or reasons to support your opinion and use linking words for coherence.

範例: I strongly believe that singing can reduce stress and bring happiness to people's lives because it is a form of art that many enjoy. For example, singing can be especially helpful for people with anxiety, as it helps them relax and feel more positive.

× I do like singing when I'm taking but 'cause that's the only time when I can sing confidently be 'cause I always have public figure, public fear that I won't be able to sync properly and people would judge me.

✓ I do like singing when I'm talking because that's the only time when I can sing confidently because I always have public fear that I won't be able to sing properly and people would judge me.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'taking' instead of 'talking' and 'sync' instead of 'sing'. Also, 'be 'cause' is a colloquial contraction of 'because' and should be written fully for clarity. The verb form 'singing' is correct here as a gerund after 'like'. The sentence needed correction for word choice and clarity, not verb form.

× I never learned how to sing.

✓ I have never learned how to sing.

The sentence uses simple past 'learned' but the context implies an experience up to now, so present perfect 'have never learned' is more appropriate in Australian English to express life experience.

× But I saw a lot of videos on improving the voice nodes, how to go low and high on some pinch.

✓ But I saw a lot of videos on improving the vocal cords, how to go low and high on some pitch.

The phrase 'voice nodes' is incorrect; the correct term is 'vocal cords'. Also, 'pinch' is incorrect; the correct word is 'pitch' when referring to musical notes. These are vocabulary errors rather than preposition errors, but they affect the sentence's correctness.

× Because one of my friend is a singer, he sings in a bar, so you always try to convince me to sing with him.

✓ Because one of my friends is a singer, he sings in a bar, so he always tries to convince me to sing with him.

The phrase 'one of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' to agree in number. Also, 'you always try' is incorrect as the subject is 'he', so it should be 'he always tries'. This is a subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issue.

× If I would ever want to sing, I want sing for my girlfriend.

✓ If I ever wanted to sing, I would want to sing for my girlfriend.

The conditional sentence is incorrectly formed. The correct form is second conditional: 'If I ever wanted to sing, I would want to sing...'. Also, 'I want sing' is missing 'to' before 'sing'. Modal verbs and conditional forms need to be used correctly.

× 'Cause I love her more than the voice will come from my heart.

✓ Because I love her more than the voice that will come from my heart.

The sentence is missing the relative pronoun 'that' to connect 'the voice' and the clause 'will come from my heart'. Also, 'Cause' is informal and should be 'Because' in formal speech.

× If she's the audience, she would like it.

✓ If she is the audience, she would like it.

Contraction 'she's' is acceptable in speech but for clarity, 'she is' is better. No major grammar error here, but the sentence is conditional and the verb forms are acceptable.

× If somebody else is listening, they might not like it.

✓ If somebody else is listening, they might not like it.

This sentence is correct. 'They' is used as a singular pronoun here, which is acceptable in modern English.

× I strongly believe that singing can help reduce a lot of stress and bring happiness toward people live because that is an art and whatever art we follow, we always enjoyed.

✓ I strongly believe that singing can help reduce a lot of stress and bring happiness to people's lives because it is an art and whatever art we follow, we always enjoy it.

The phrase 'bring happiness toward people live' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to' and 'people live' should be 'people's lives'. Also, 'we always enjoyed' should be 'we always enjoy' to maintain present tense. The sentence needed corrections in prepositions and verb tense.

× Singing is something which is very beneficial for the people who have anxiety as it reduces frame.

✓ Singing is something which is very beneficial for people who have anxiety as it reduces stress.

The phrase 'reduces frame' is incorrect; likely intended word is 'stress'. Also, 'the people' can be simplified to 'people' for general statements. This is a vocabulary and article usage issue.