唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý tưởng không được truyền đạt tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp thêm chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp từ.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When I was a kid, I joined a military music club at school. Also, I was a member of the music club in high school, where I often sang in front of my classmates. This experience helped me gain confidence in singing.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng bị ngắt quãng và thiếu sự liên kết giữa các câu. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và chú ý ngữ pháp để truyền đạt ý rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời sinh động.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in high school. I was a member of the musicians club, where senior members taught me proper singing techniques. They showed me how to control my breathing and improve my vocal skills, which helped me maintain my voice.

建議: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng câu trả lời hơi dài dòng và có nhiều phần lặp lại. Hãy cố gắng trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Đồng thời, sử dụng từ vựng đa dạng và chính xác hơn để thể hiện ý tốt hơn.

範例: I want to sing for everyone close to me, such as my best friends, parents, sister, and boyfriend. Singing for them is a way to express my love and appreciation. I feel comfortable and happy when I sing in front of people I care about.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt với ý tưởng rõ ràng và có sử dụng liên từ. Tuy nhiên, bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và phát âm để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời sinh động và thuyết phục hơn.

範例: I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. It helps them relax and refresh their minds after a long day. Moreover, singing allows people to express their emotions. For example, many people feel happier and less stressed when they listen to their favorite songs.

× Why I have why singing, what scene I was a kid because it makes me feel happy and relaxed when I was younger I joined a military music club at school I also.

✓ Why do I like singing? When I was a kid, it made me feel happy and relaxed. When I was younger, I joined a military music club at school.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper question structure. The question 'Why I have why singing' is incorrect; it should be 'Why do I like singing?'. Also, multiple ideas are combined without punctuation, causing confusion. Breaking into clear sentences improves clarity.

× A member of musics in club at high school and I often say in front of my classmate which helped me get in.

✓ I was a member of the music club at high school and I often sang in front of my classmates, which helped me get in.

The word 'musics' is incorrect; 'music' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. 'Say' should be 'sang' to indicate the action of singing. 'Classmate' should be plural 'classmates' to match the context.

× Yes, I. Learned how to sing when I was in high school and I was a member of musicians club Ann my senior.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in high school and I was a member of the musicians club with my seniors.

The sentence has a typo 'Ann' which should be 'and'. 'Musicians club' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Senior' should be plural 'seniors' to indicate multiple senior members.

× They teach me master senior members.

✓ The senior members taught me.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'They teach me master senior members' is confusing; it should be 'The senior members taught me' to clearly express who taught the speaker.

× They teach me how to sing in a proper way, how I can in house and excels so I can keep my voice.

✓ They taught me how to sing properly, how I can improve and excel so I can maintain my voice.

'In a proper way' is better expressed as 'properly'. 'In house' is incorrect; likely intended 'improve'. 'Excels' should be 'excel'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× I want, you know, I think for everyone that close to me, my best friend, my parents, my sister, my boyfriend, everyone, I feel like comfortable when I'm near them.

✓ I want to sing for everyone who is close to me: my best friend, my parents, my sister, my boyfriend, everyone. I feel comfortable when I'm near them.

'That close to me' should be 'who is close to me' to refer to people. 'I feel like comfortable' is incorrect; it should be 'I feel comfortable'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I always think. So yeah, I want to sing for everyone. For who? Everyone who I love. Like a way to show my love for them.

✓ I always think about it. So yeah, I want to sing for everyone I love as a way to show my love for them.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. Combining them into a coherent sentence improves flow and clarity.

× Not only does it help them relax and refresh their mind after a long day, but it also allowed them to express their emotion.

✓ Not only does it help them relax and refresh their minds after a long day, but it also allows them to express their emotions.

The modal verb 'does' requires the present tense 'allow' to be 'allows' for subject-verb agreement. 'Mind' and 'emotion' should be plural to match the context.

× For many place sample, many people feel more cheerful and less stress when they think they favorite songs.

✓ For example, many people feel more cheerful and less stressed when they listen to their favorite songs.

'Place sample' is incorrect; 'for example' is the correct phrase. 'Less stress' should be 'less stressed' to use the adjective form. 'They favorite songs' should be 'their favorite songs'. Also, 'think' is incorrect; 'listen to' fits better.