唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows good ideas but contains several grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'saying' instead of 'singing'. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing every day because it helps me relieve stress from work and makes me feel happier. Additionally, singing with my daughter strengthens our family bond and brings us closer together.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammar errors and awkward expressions, such as 'saying' instead of 'singing'. Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct sentence structures. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

範例: Yes, I took a few singing lessons when I was 10. My piano teacher, who was passionate about both piano and singing, taught me. I learned a lot from her, and my singing improved significantly after those lessons.

建議: Your answer has good intentions but contains many grammar mistakes and unclear phrases, such as 'lost singing' and 'in bounding together'. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, be more specific and use linking words to clarify your ideas.

範例: I would love to sing for my daughter because she enjoys music as well. Singing for her usually makes her happier, and it helps us spend quality time bonding together.

建議: Your answer has good content but contains grammar errors and unclear phrases, such as 'this studies' and 'saying Cambrie'. Try to use correct grammar and vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Many studies have shown that music helps release dopamine, a chemical that improves mood. Personally, I feel happier when I sing alone or with my daughter.

× I like saying everyday it helps me.

✓ I like singing every day; it helps me.

The verb 'say' is incorrectly used instead of 'sing' in the -ing form. Also, 'everyday' should be two words 'every day' when meaning each day. The correct gerund form for the activity is 'singing'.

× Release the stress that I got during work and I feel a lot happier after saying.

✓ It helps me release the stress that I get during work, and I feel a lot happier after singing.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb structure. 'Release' should be connected to 'It helps me' to form a complete sentence. Also, 'got' should be 'get' to match present tense. 'Saying' should be 'singing' as the correct gerund form.

× I also like to sing with my daughter which helps me connect with her as a family.

✓ I also like to sing with my daughter, which helps me connect with her as a family.

A comma is needed before 'which' to correctly separate the relative clause. The verb form 'sing' is correct here.

× It is not also it is not helpful for me but also help for my daughter.

✓ It is not only helpful for me but also helpful for my daughter.

The phrase 'not also it is not' is incorrect. The correct correlative conjunction is 'not only... but also'. Also, 'help' should be 'helpful' to match the adjective form.

× I took a few lessons when I was 10, learning how to sing.

✓ I took a few lessons when I was 10 to learn how to sing.

The phrase 'learning how to sing' is awkward here. Using 'to learn' clarifies the purpose of taking lessons and fits better with the past tense context.

× The teacher was actually my piano teacher, who was very passionate not only about piano but also about saying I learned a lot from her and I was able to sing better after those lessons.

✓ The teacher was actually my piano teacher, who was very passionate not only about piano but also about singing. I learned a lot from her, and I was able to sing better after those lessons.

The sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. 'Saying' should be 'singing'. Adding a period and separating into two sentences improves clarity.

× I would love to sing for my daughter who also lost singing.

✓ I would love to sing for my daughter who also loves singing.

'Lost' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'loves'. Also, 'singing' is the correct gerund form after 'loves'.

× When I was saying for her, she was usually happier and it helped us build very good quality time in bounding together.

✓ When I was singing for her, she was usually happier, and it helped us build very good quality time bonding together.

'Saying' should be 'singing'. 'Bounding' is a typo and should be 'bonding'. Commas are added for clarity.

× A lot of this studies have shown that music in general help people release dopamine, which is a chemical that makes people happier.

✓ A lot of these studies have shown that music in general helps people release dopamine, which is a chemical that makes people happier.

'This studies' is incorrect; it should be 'these studies' to match plural noun. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'music'.

× I personally feel a lot happier when singing either by myself or with my daughter.

✓ I personally feel a lot happier when singing, either by myself or with my daughter.

A comma after 'singing' improves readability. The verb form 'singing' is correct here.

× So yes, I do believe saying Cambrie.

✓ So yes, I do believe singing can bring happiness.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Saying Cambrie' is likely a mishearing or typo. The corrected sentence completes the thought appropriately.