唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Жауабыңызда сөйлемдер толық және анық болуы керек. Қазіргі жауапта сөйлемдер үзіліп, мағынасы толық ашылмаған. Сонымен қатар, 'hopes' деген сөзді дұрыс қолданбағансыз, оның орнына 'helps' болуы керек. Жауабыңызды 3-4 толық сөйлеммен, нақты және табиғи етіп құрастырыңыз.

範例: I like singing because it helps me control my voice and express my emotions. When I sing, I feel connected to the song and can communicate my feelings effectively.

建議: Жауабыңызда грамматикалық қателер көп және сөйлемдер түсініксіз. Мысалы, 'I have learned how the same' деген тіркес дұрыс емес. Жауабыңызды нақты, қарапайым және дұрыс грамматикалық құрылыммен беріңіз. Қосымша ақпаратты логикалық түрде байланыстырыңыз.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child. I enjoyed it because people told me I had a great voice, which encouraged me to continue practicing.

建議: Жауабыңызда кейбір сөйлемдер түсініксіз және артық сөздер бар. Мысалы, 'Hawaii can see my hobbies' деген сөйлем мағынасыз. Жауабыңызды қысқа, нақты және логикалық байланысты етіп құрастырыңыз.

範例: I would like to sing for my friends, family, and especially my wife because I love them. Singing is my hobby, and I want to share it with the people I care about.

建議: Жауабыңызда грамматикалық және сөз қолдану қателері бар. Мысалы, 'like to singing' орнына 'likes singing' дұрыс. Сонымен қатар, сөйлемдерді логикалық байланыстырып, нақты әрі табиғи етіп айтуға тырысыңыз.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. I have a friend who has loved singing since childhood, and she feels happy and more confident every time she sings.

× I like singing because it helps you to control your voice and just feel this song and just.

✓ I like singing because it helps you control your voice and just feel the song.

The phrase 'helps you to control' is correct but 'helps you control' is more natural. Also, 'feel this song' should be 'feel the song' because 'the' is used for specific things known to the listener. The sentence also had an unnecessary 'and just' at the end which is incomplete and should be removed.

× It uh. Hopes you to communicate with your feelings.

✓ It helps you communicate with your feelings.

The word 'Hopes' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'helps'. Also, 'to communicate' after 'helps' should be without 'to' as 'help' can be followed by the base verb without 'to' in this context.

× I have learned how the same when I was a kid, I liked it because it was just great and people told me told me that they that I have our great voice.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was a kid. I liked it because it was great and people told me that I have a great voice.

The phrase 'have learned how the same' is incorrect; it should be 'learned how to sing'. Also, 'have our great voice' is incorrect; it should be 'have a great voice'. The sentence was also run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× So I have they have prize me and that's why I was thinking.

✓ So they have praised me and that's why I was thinking about it.

'I have they have prize me' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'they have praised me'. Also, 'prize' is a noun; the verb is 'praise'. The sentence needed restructuring for clarity.

× I would like to sing for my friends and my family and other close people, my wife because I just love them and I want them to see me.

✓ I would like to sing for my friends, my family, and other close people, including my wife, because I just love them and I want them to see me.

The sentence needed commas for clarity and 'other close people, my wife' is better expressed as 'other close people, including my wife'. This clarifies the relationship and improves sentence flow.

× Hawaii can see my hobbies and just what the things that I love to do.

✓ They can see my hobbies and the things that I love to do.

'Hawaii' is incorrect here; it should be 'they' referring to the people mentioned earlier. Also, 'just what the things that I love to do' is awkward and should be 'the things that I love to do'.

× Yes I do, I had a friend who like to singing, she sung since she was she was child and every time she sings she feels happy.

✓ Yes, I do. I had a friend who liked singing; she has sung since she was a child, and every time she sings, she feels happy.

'Friend who like to singing' should be 'friend who liked singing' to match past tense and correct verb form. 'She sung' should be 'she has sung' for present perfect tense. 'She was she was child' should be 'she was a child'.

× She tells me that she feels happiness and it just gives her a piece of self-confidence.

✓ She tells me that she feels happy and it just gives her a bit of self-confidence.

'Feels happiness' is incorrect; the adjective 'happy' should be used instead of the noun 'happiness'. 'A piece of self-confidence' is unnatural; 'a bit of self-confidence' is more appropriate.