唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct vocabulary. For example, say "Yes, I like singing because it allows me to immerse myself in the music and feel the emotions conveyed by the song."

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me connect with the music and express my feelings. When I sing, I feel relaxed and happy, which makes it a great way to relieve stress.

建議: Your answer is confusing and lacks clear structure. Respond directly with a topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage. For example, "Yes, I learned to sing in primary school during music classes. Although the teacher was skilled and helpful, I realized I am not very talented at singing."

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school. The music teacher taught us different songs and techniques. However, I found that I was not very good at singing compared to my classmates.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to give a direct response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and improve grammar. For example, "I don't want to sing for anyone because I believe my voice is not good. I lack singing skills and confidence."

範例: I don't want to sing for others because I feel my voice is not pleasant. Although I enjoy singing privately, I lack the confidence to perform in front of people.

建議: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your opinion with specific details. For example, "Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and connect with others."

範例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people. When you sing, you express your feelings and share positive emotions with others. This can improve your mood and create a joyful atmosphere.

× You like singing? Yes, but I enjoy saying because saying I can immerse myself into the music, into the sun, and I could feel the background, the feeling the song can convey to me.

✓ Do you like singing? Yes, I enjoy singing because I can immerse myself in the music and feel the emotions the song conveys to me.

The original sentence has sentence structure errors and unclear phrasing. 'You like singing?' is a question but lacks auxiliary verb 'do'. 'Saying' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. 'Immerse myself into' should be 'immerse myself in'. 'Into the sun' is unclear and likely incorrect in context, so it was removed. The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, my primary school I have music class and the teacher teach daughters how to sing a song and and she had talked to several skilled at the same better but I'm not very talented anything.

✓ Yes, in my primary school I had music classes and the teacher taught us how to sing songs. She had talked to several skilled singers, but I am not very talented.

The original sentence has tense errors: 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. 'Teach' should be 'taught'. 'Daughters' is incorrect pronoun; 'us' is appropriate. The phrase 'she had talked to several skilled at the same better' is unclear and was corrected to 'she had talked to several skilled singers'. The sentence was split for clarity.

× So I learned it before but I'm not good at it.

✓ So I learned it before, but I am not good at it.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'I'm' was expanded to 'I am' for formality and clarity. A comma was added before 'but' to separate the clauses properly.

× Actually, I don't want to sing for anyone because I think that my voice is terrible. Am I thinking skill? My singing scale is terrible too. I am not good, I think. I know I'm not very Intel with the singing talent, so I don't think I want anything for anyone.

✓ Actually, I don't want to sing for anyone because I think my voice is terrible. My singing scale is terrible too. I am not good at it, I think. I know I don't have much singing talent, so I don't want to sing for anyone.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun use and unclear phrases. 'Am I thinking skill?' is unclear and removed. 'Intel' is incorrect; 'intelligent' or 'talented' is appropriate. 'I don't think I want anything for anyone' is unclear and corrected to 'I don't want to sing for anyone'. Pronouns and phrases were corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Of course, like singing, it is not just like listening to the music singing you can make a feedback that you can convey to the altar out of your surroundings.

✓ Of course, singing is not just like listening to music; when you sing, you can give feedback and convey your feelings to others around you.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has unclear phrasing. 'Make a feedback' is incorrect; 'give feedback' is correct. 'Convey to the altar out of your surroundings' is unclear; corrected to 'convey your feelings to others around you'. The sentence was restructured for clarity and correct preposition use.

× So if you singing like you can bring yourself something that you can generate it from yourself the positive emotions.

✓ So if you are singing, you can bring yourself positive emotions that you generate from within.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'you singing' instead of 'you are singing'. The phrase 'bring yourself something that you can generate it from yourself the positive emotions' is awkward and redundant; corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness. The verb form and sentence structure were improved.