唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding incomplete sentences and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

範例: No, I don't like singing because my voice is not very good. However, I enjoy listening to music a lot. Sometimes, I sing quietly to myself using my cell phone, but I don't sing in front of others.

建議: Improve your answer by correcting grammar mistakes and using linking words to make your response coherent. Also, avoid repetition and clarify your points clearly.

範例: No, I have never learned how to sing. When I was younger, I tried singing but realized my voice was not good. Therefore, I never took any singing lessons.

建議: Make your answer more structured and clear by directly answering the question first, then adding specific details. Use correct vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases or names. Also, keep sentences grammatically correct.

範例: I would like to sing for people I love. For example, I admire Egyptian singers like Amr Diab and Abdel Halim Hafez. I prefer singing in Arabic because it is my native language.

建議: Enhance your answer by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to explain your opinion clearly. Also, correct grammar mistakes to make your answer more natural.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Similarly, listening to music also improves people's moods. Both activities have a positive effect on our emotions.

× No, I don't like singing 'cause my voice is very bad, but I like listening to music, of course and sometimes I. Singing with a low voice.

✓ No, I don't like singing because my voice is very bad, but I like listening to music, of course, and sometimes I sing with a low voice.

The original sentence has a sentence fragment 'sometimes I. Singing with a low voice.' which is incomplete and incorrect. It should be combined into a complete sentence 'sometimes I sing with a low voice.' Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context.

× And I do it with my cell phone, not in front of someone.

✓ And I do it on my cell phone, not in front of someone.

The correct preposition to use with devices like 'cell phone' is 'on' rather than 'with'. 'Do it on my cell phone' means using the phone as a device to perform the action.

× No I didn't do this because as I mentioned my voice since I was younger.

✓ No, I didn't do this because, as I mentioned, my voice has been bad since I was younger.

The sentence lacks clarity and proper tense usage. 'My voice since I was younger' is incomplete. Using present perfect 'has been bad' indicates a condition continuing from the past to present. Also, commas are needed for clarity.

× I tried to sync but I discovered my voice was so bad so.

✓ I tried to sing but I discovered my voice was so bad.

The word 'sync' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'so.' which is unnecessary and should be removed.

× I have never learned how to sync.

✓ I have never learned how to sing.

Again, 'sync' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'sing'. The present perfect tense 'have never learned' is appropriate here.

× I would think for anyone who must I love?

✓ I would think for anyone whom I love.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Must I love?' is incorrect. The correct relative pronoun is 'whom' as the object of 'love'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× And it could be a Egyptian singer like Tom Brady, Abora Timer Husni.

✓ And it could be an Egyptian singer like Tom Brady, Abora Timer Husni.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'Egyptian'.

× But uh, yes, I prefer to sing in Arabic rather than English because my Arabic is natively.

✓ But, yes, I prefer to sing in Arabic rather than English because Arabic is my native language.

'My Arabic is natively' is incorrect. 'Native' is an adjective, and the correct phrase is 'Arabic is my native language'. Also, 'uh' is informal and can be omitted.

× Yes, of course it can bring happiness to people. Even listening to music can bring happiness. Both of them are very affectively in the human moods.

✓ Yes, of course it can bring happiness to people. Even listening to music can bring happiness. Both of them are very effective in affecting human moods.

The word 'affectively' is an adverb meaning 'in an emotional manner' and is incorrect here. The adjective 'effective' and the verb 'affecting' are appropriate to express the intended meaning.