唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer has good ideas but the sentences are unclear and some words are incorrect or confusing. Try to use simple and clear sentences, avoid redundancy, and connect your ideas logically. For example, explain how singing relaxes you and connects people, using linking words like 'because' or 'and'.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and feel happy. When I sing, I feel more connected to others, and it makes boring moments more enjoyable.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and has grammar mistakes. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to show contrast. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

範例: I have not practiced singing formally, but I learned by listening to music and watching others sing. I also attended some singing classes at school, which helped me improve a little.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Please try to give a direct answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases and use simple vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

範例: I want to sing for my mother because she enjoys my singing and it makes her happy. I like to share my voice with her to show my love.

建議: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear sentences and incorrect word usage. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Explain how singing affects you and others in simple sentences.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and forget their stress. When I sing, I feel calm and joyful, and I believe others feel the same.

× Singing helps us to make our mood so relaxed.

✓ Singing helps us to make our mood very relaxed.

The phrase 'so relaxed' is informal and less precise; 'very relaxed' is more appropriate here to express a high degree of relaxation.

× When we sing then people get connected to us.

✓ When we sing, people get connected to us.

The word 'then' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow; removing it improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Singing also has to mix our boring like McFly refreshing.

✓ Singing also helps to mix our boredom with refreshing feelings like McFly.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical; restructuring it clarifies the intended meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× Similarly, singing also helps to change our mood moreover wildly.

✓ Similarly, singing also helps to change our mood, moreover, wildly.

The adverb 'wildly' is misplaced and unclear; adding commas improves readability, but the meaning of 'wildly' here is ambiguous and may need rephrasing.

× I really don't have any practice regarding my singing.

✓ I really haven't had any practice regarding my singing.

The present perfect tense 'haven't had' is more appropriate to express lack of experience up to now rather than simple present 'don't have'.

× I have long singing by listening to music and I have learned it by seeing other people singing the song.

✓ I have been singing for a long time by listening to music, and I have learned it by watching other people sing songs.

The original sentence lacks proper tense and verb forms; 'have been singing' indicates continuous action, and 'watching' is the correct verb form here.

× Moreover, I was also taught about the singing classes in my school level that helped me to sing a little bit.

✓ Moreover, I was also taught in singing classes at my school level, which helped me to sing a little bit.

The phrase 'taught about the singing classes' is incorrect; it should be 'taught in singing classes'. Also, 'which' correctly connects the relative clause.

× However, I don't know how actually how to say.

✓ However, I don't actually know how to say it.

The original sentence has redundant 'how' and lacks an object; correcting word order and adding 'it' clarifies the meaning.

× Singing is my.

✓ Singing is mine.

The phrase 'Singing is my' is incomplete; 'mine' is the correct possessive pronoun to complete the sentence.

× Hello, I want to sing a song for my mother because she loves me singing the song for her.

✓ Hello, I want to sing a song for my mother because she loves me singing songs for her.

The phrase 'she loves me singing the song for her' is awkward; plural 'songs' and rephrasing improve clarity.

× She loves my voice Anaheim Similarly she's also his attracted to are the old that I used.

✓ She loves my voice. Similarly, she's also attracted to the old songs that I used to sing.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect pronouns and words; correcting pronouns and clarifying meaning improves comprehension.

× Singing really mix happy happiness in the people are usually get relaxed when I sing a song more about one I sing a song then I name I had to my product.

✓ Singing really mixes happiness in people; they usually get relaxed when I sing a song. Moreover, when I sing a song, I feel relieved from my stress.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear; restructuring and correcting verb forms improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Everything that gets me that makes me stressed.

✓ Everything that stresses me out is relieved when I sing.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear; rephrasing provides a complete and meaningful sentence.

× Similarly, when I sing a song I get into a war.

✓ Similarly, when I sing a song, I enter a state of calmness.

The phrase 'get into a war' is incorrect and confusing; replacing it with 'enter a state of calmness' conveys the intended meaning.