唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect the natural flow. Try to give a clear and concise response directly addressing the question, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I like singing because one of my close friends inspired me. I joined coaching classes and improved my skills. However, I had to stop due to my studies.

建議: Your answer is brief and has some language mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to make your answer more coherent and informative.

範例: Yes, I have learned singing from the basics to advanced songs. Additionally, I have learned to play the harmonium, which helps me understand music better.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid incomplete sentences.

範例: I want to sing for my mom because she supports me. The first time I performed on stage, I sang for the audience, my teacher, and as a tribute to Lord Jagannath.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but is not expressed clearly. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your opinion logically and naturally.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For example, when I feel low, singing or dancing lifts my mood and takes me to a different world away from reality.

× Yes, I don't like singing becauses one of my closes friend used to learn singing and.

✓ Yes, I didn't like singing because one of my close friends used to learn singing.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'becauses' instead of 'because' and 'closes friend' instead of 'close friends'. Also, the conjunction 'and' at the end is unnecessary and creates a sentence fragment. The sentence should be corrected to properly connect ideas and use correct spelling and plural form.

× Bing inspired form her I will I joined coaching classes for singing from then on I find myself to be a good singer, which I continued continued, but later on you to studies I had to live.

✓ Being inspired by her, I joined coaching classes for singing. From then on, I found myself to be a good singer, which I continued, but later on, due to studies, I had to leave.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'Bing' should be 'Being', 'form' should be 'by', 'will I' is incorrect and should be removed, 'continued continued' is repeated, 'you to studies' should be 'due to studies', and 'live' should be 'leave'. The sentence also lacks proper punctuation and structure. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I have learned how to say from the basics to song.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing from the basics to songs.

The word 'say' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'sing'. Also, 'song' should be plural 'songs' to indicate learning multiple songs. The present perfect tense 'have learned' is appropriate here.

× Even I learned how to play harmonium.

✓ I have even learned how to play the harmonium.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'harmonium'. Also, placing 'even' after 'I have' improves sentence flow. Using present perfect 'have learned' fits the context of experience.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

The correct object pronoun 'whom' should be used instead of 'who' because it is the object of the preposition 'for'. However, in spoken English, 'who' is often used informally.

× I want to sing for my mom.

✓ I want to sing for my mom.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× But the first time when I had a stage experience, I sang it for the audience and for my teacher.

✓ But the first time I had stage experience, I sang for the audience and my teacher.

The phrase 'had a stage experience' is awkward; 'had stage experience' is more natural. Also, 'sang it' is incorrect; 'sang' alone suffices. The sentence is corrected for clarity and natural expression.

× For the ideal Lord Jagannath.

✓ It was for the idol of Lord Jagannath.

The word 'ideal' is incorrect; it should be 'idol'. Also, the sentence fragment needs to be completed to form a full sentence for clarity.

× Yes, if I talk about myself, singing does bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, if I talk about myself, singing does bring happiness to people.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Lucas and I'm not in a mood to do anything.

✓ Sometimes, I am not in the mood to do anything.

'Lucas' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'sometimes'. Also, 'I'm not in a mood' should be 'I'm not in the mood'. The sentence is corrected for meaning and grammar.

× I really prefer to sing or dance.

✓ I really prefer singing or dancing.

The verb 'prefer' is usually followed by gerunds ('singing', 'dancing') rather than infinitives ('to sing', 'to dance'). This correction improves grammatical accuracy.

× Singing. Takes you to a different world rather than from reality.

✓ Singing takes you to a different world rather than reality.

The period after 'Singing' is incorrect; it should be part of the sentence. Also, 'rather than from reality' is incorrect; 'rather than reality' is correct. The sentence is corrected for punctuation and preposition use.