唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to directly answer the question with a simple topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

範例: Yes, I like singing even though I'm not very good at it. I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood. Also, I often listen to other people's music, which inspires me to sing more.

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your situation with specific details and linking words. Avoid grammatical errors and incomplete sentences.

範例: I have never formally learnt how to sing, although it was my childhood passion. Unfortunately, my family could not afford singing lessons, so I never had the chance to take them. However, I still enjoy singing on my own.

建議: Your answer should directly address who you want to sing for. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

範例: I would like to sing for my family members, especially during special occasions like family gatherings. I also enjoy listening to famous musicians from around the world, which inspires me to sing better.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better structure. Use linking words to explain how singing or music can reduce stress and bring happiness, with specific examples.

範例: Yes, I believe singing and music can bring happiness to people. For example, when we feel stressed, listening to calming music like classical or meditation songs can help us relax and feel peaceful. Singing can have a similar effect by improving our mood.

× Why is they don't like seeing you?

✓ Why don't they like seeing you?

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'is' with the plural pronoun 'they'. The correct auxiliary verb for 'they' in negative questions is 'do', so it should be 'Why don't they like seeing you?'. This corrects subject-verb agreement and proper question formation.

× I'm not much a very good proficient at singing,

✓ I'm not very proficient at singing,

The phrase 'much a very good proficient' is incorrect. 'Proficient' is an adjective and should be preceded by 'very' to intensify it. 'Much' and 'a' are unnecessary and incorrect here. The corrected phrase is 'very proficient'.

× Because singing may cover mind, it can make our mind more relaxed than every any other activities

✓ Because singing may cover the mind, it can make our mind more relaxed than any other activity

The phrase 'cover mind' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'cover the mind' is more appropriate if intended metaphorically. Also, 'every any other activities' is incorrect; it should be 'any other activity' to compare singular with singular and use the correct quantifier.

× it's also my habit of hearing the music's of other persons also.

✓ it's also my habit to listen to the music of other people.

'Hearing the music's of other persons' is awkward and incorrect. 'Habit of hearing' should be 'habit to listen to', and 'music's' is incorrect possessive; it should be 'music'. 'Other persons' is better expressed as 'other people'.

× Not that that it was my passion to become a singer, to learn singing was my childhood passion, but I don't how much more facilities or my hair, though my house.

✓ It was my childhood passion to learn singing, but I don't have many facilities or support at my home.

The original sentence is confusing and contains tense and vocabulary errors. 'Don't how much more facilities or my hair, though my house' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the intended meaning using proper past tense and vocabulary.

× My parents were not much wealthiest person it to send me for aligning singing.

✓ My parents were not wealthy enough to send me for singing lessons.

'Not much wealthiest person' is incorrect; 'wealthiest' is a superlative adjective and cannot be used with 'not much'. The correct phrase is 'not wealthy enough'. 'Aligning singing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing lessons'.

× That's why I couldn't Lansing Still, it's my it's a feeling of.

✓ That's why I couldn't learn singing properly; it's a feeling I have.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Lansing' is likely a typo for 'learning singing'. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I like famous musician musician singing very much.

✓ I like famous musicians singing very much.

The repetition 'musician musician' is an error. Also, 'musician' should be plural to refer to multiple famous musicians.

× I like to hear the music's of different musicians all over the world.

✓ I like to hear the music of different musicians all over the world.

'Music's' is an incorrect possessive form here; 'music' is uncountable and does not take an apostrophe 's'.

× there is some family members in my family who are well at singing.

✓ There are some family members in my family who are good at singing.

'There is' should be 'There are' because 'family members' is plural. Also, 'well at singing' should be 'good at singing'.

× I like to hear the songs of that one in We are at very special occasions our family gathering, I want to hear them.

✓ I like to hear the songs of that person. At very special occasions and family gatherings, I want to hear them.

The sentence is run-on and confusing. 'That one' should be 'that person'. Also, 'We are at very special occasions our family gathering' is incorrect and needs to be split and rephrased.

× music is one of the essential thing that you can make us more come more come full mine.

✓ Music is one of the essential things that can make us feel more calm and peaceful.

'Essential thing' should be plural 'essential things'. 'Make us more come more come full mine' is unclear and likely a misphrasing of 'make us feel more calm and peaceful'.

× When we are in a stressful situation, we can hear some music.

✓ When we are in a stressful situation, we can listen to some music.

'Hear' is passive and means perceiving sound unintentionally. 'Listen to' is active and intentional, which fits better here.

× It's like a type of yoga and meditation music, and also can stress attack part of meditations, chanting music and their calm classical music and make cover mine more more.

✓ It's like a type of yoga and meditation music, and it can also help reduce stress. Meditation, chanting music, and calm classical music can make the mind more relaxed.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. 'Stress attack part of meditations' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the intended meaning and improves sentence structure.