唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ihre Antwort ist verständlich, aber etwas unstrukturiert und enthält Wiederholungen. Versuchen Sie, Ihre Gedanken klarer und flüssiger zu formulieren, indem Sie vollständige Sätze verwenden und Redundanzen vermeiden. Verwenden Sie zudem verbindende Wörter, um Ihre Ideen logisch zu verknüpfen.

範例: No, I don't really like singing because I don't think I have the talent. However, I do enjoy singing in the shower, but I feel too shy to sing in front of other people since I believe my voice is not very good.

建議: Ihre Antwort ist kurz und direkt, aber etwas ungenau formuliert. Achten Sie darauf, klare und korrekte Sätze zu bilden und verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter, um Ihre Antwort flüssiger zu gestalten.

範例: No, I have never learnt how to sing, but I have learned to play another instrument, the drums, which I really enjoy.

建議: Ihre Antwort zeigt Emotionen, aber die Struktur könnte verbessert werden. Versuchen Sie, Ihre Gedanken klarer zu ordnen und vollständige Sätze zu verwenden. Vermeiden Sie umgangssprachliche Ausdrücke und achten Sie auf die Grammatik.

範例: I would like to sing for my mom because she deserves it. She brought me into this world, and I feel grateful to her. Singing for her would be a way to show my appreciation and leave my comfort zone.

建議: Ihre Antwort ist unvollständig und enthält viele Pausen und Wiederholungen. Versuchen Sie, Ihre Gedanken klar und vollständig auszudrücken, indem Sie vollständige Sätze verwenden und Ihre Ideen logisch verbinden.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because music allows people to communicate without speaking the same language. It creates a positive energy that connects people in a group and makes them feel joyful.

× Really, really good.

✓ Really, really well.

The word 'good' is an adjective and should be used to describe nouns, but here it modifies the verb 'sing', so the adverb 'well' is correct.

× And I like to sing in the shower, but that's it. In front of other people.

✓ And I like to sing in the shower, but that's it in front of other people.

The sentence is fragmented; 'In front of other people.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence for clarity.

× So because my my voice is not that. Goods.

✓ So because my voice is not that good.

'Goods' is a noun meaning items or products; the adjective 'good' should be used to describe 'voice'. Also, the sentence was fragmented and needed correction.

× No, but I have learnt any other instrument, which was the drums.

✓ No, but I have learnt another instrument, which was the drums.

'Any' is incorrect here; 'another' is the correct quantifier to indicate one more item of the same kind.

× That's something that I learned.

✓ That's something that I have learned.

Since the learning is relevant to the present, the present perfect tense 'have learned' is more appropriate than simple past 'learned'.

× I would wanna represent, do it for my mom because I'm here for her.

✓ I would want to represent, do it for my mom because I'm here for her.

'Wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech or writing.

× Yes, because singing and music you can. Communicate with each other without even understanding or speaking the same language.

✓ Yes, because singing and music can help you communicate with each other without even understanding or speaking the same language.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject-verb-object structure; it needs to be combined and clarified.

× And. I also think that I I don't know it just it creates energy around you and the group you are in.

✓ And I also think that, I don't know, it just creates energy around you and the group you are in.

The sentence contains unnecessary periods and repeated words, causing fragmentation; it should be smoothed out for clarity.