唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장 간 연결어를 사용하여 더 논리적이고 유창하게 답변을 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 'because' 대신 'as'나 'since'를 사용하고, 문장 길이를 적절히 조절하세요.

範例: Yes, I love singing both with my friends and alone in the singing room, as it makes me feel free. Moreover, I believe that when I sing, I can do anything, which is why I enjoy it so much.

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 문법적 정확성을 높이세요. 또한, 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요.

範例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing, but I know the basics. One of my friends, who wants to become a professional singer, has shared some singing techniques with me.

建議: 답변이 단절되고 문장 구성이 부자연스럽습니다. 문장 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하고, 명확한 이유를 제시하세요.

範例: I want to sing for myself because usually, I sing for my friends or my boyfriend. Therefore, I would like to have a chance to enjoy singing just for me.

建議: 답변이 불명확하고 문법적 오류가 많습니다. 문장을 명확하고 논리적으로 구성하며, 구체적인 이유나 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 만드세요.

範例: Yes, I firmly believe that singing can bring happiness to people. For example, many people feel comforted when they listen to their favorite singers, especially during difficult times.

× And I think. That I can do anything when I'm singing.

✓ And I think that I can do anything when I'm singing.

The original sentence incorrectly splits a single thought into two fragments, which is a sentence structure error. Combining them into one sentence with 'that' creates a complete and grammatically correct sentence.

× No, I have not learned about the way to sing.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing.

The phrase 'learned about the way to sing' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'learned how to sing' to indicate acquiring the skill of singing.

× One of my friends loved to sing and want to be all musical singer so I heard about the way to sing.

✓ One of my friends loves to sing and wants to be a musical singer, so I heard about how to sing from her.

Subject-verb agreement errors occur here: 'friends' is singular, so verbs should be 'loves' and 'wants'. Also, 'all musical singer' is incorrect; 'a musical singer' is correct. The sentence is also restructured for clarity.

× From her.

✓ from her.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or included as part of it to form a complete sentence.

× It's because. When I'm singing.

✓ It's because when I'm singing,

Separating 'It's because' and 'When I'm singing' into two sentences creates fragments. They should be combined into one sentence for grammatical correctness.

× I usually sing to my friend or. Sing to my boyfriend

✓ I usually sing to my friend or sing to my boyfriend.

Splitting the sentence into fragments with a period after 'or' is incorrect. The sentence should be continuous without unnecessary breaks.

× So I want to have a chance to sing for me.

✓ So I want to have a chance to sing for myself.

The phrase 'sing for me' is awkward here; 'sing for myself' correctly expresses the intended meaning. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× many people are given condolence from their favorite singer or. Near people.

✓ many people receive condolences from their favorite singer or close people.

'Given condolence' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'receive condolences'. Also, 'near people' is incorrect; 'close people' or 'people close to them' is appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity.