唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer has good ideas but contains some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "confident in a constable" and "after a long day's." To improve, use clear and correct expressions, avoid redundancy, and keep sentences concise. For example, say "Singing makes me feel confident and helps me relax after a long day."

範例: I love singing because it makes me feel confident and helps me relax after a long day. It also boosts my mood and gives me energy, which makes me very happy.

建議: Your answer has some unclear phrases like "a feature" and "Anna help me express myself better." Also, there are grammar errors such as "learning to single be enjoyable." To improve, use correct grammar and clear vocabulary, and organize your ideas logically with linking words.

範例: I have never learned to sing properly, but I enjoy singing as a hobby. I want to take singing lessons to improve my skills because it would help me express myself better, even if I don't perform in front of an audience.

建議: Your answer is heartfelt but has some grammar mistakes and unclear references like "I really want to sing for him." To improve, clarify your subject and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I want to sing for my grandparents because they live far away and I don't see them often. Singing their favorite songs is a special way to show my respect and affection, and it helps me feel closer to them despite the distance.

建議: Your answer has many unclear and incorrect phrases, such as "Singing is it greatly series energy" and "bring happiness in his smiles." To improve, use clear sentences, correct grammar, and provide specific examples with linking words.

範例: Absolutely. I have seen that residents in a nursing home feel happier after a singing performance. Singing creates positive energy and a joyful atmosphere, which brings smiles and happiness to people.

× it makes me feel confident in a constable

✓ it makes me feel confident and comfortable

The phrase 'confident in a constable' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'confident and comfortable'. The preposition 'in' is misused here, and 'constable' is a wrong word choice. Correcting to 'confident and comfortable' conveys the intended feeling clearly.

× after a long day's

✓ after a long day

The phrase 'after a long day's' is incomplete and incorrect. 'Day's' is a possessive form and requires a noun to follow, such as 'work' or 'effort'. Since none is provided, it should be 'after a long day' to indicate the time period.

× Singing also boost my mood and gives me a sense of happiness in energy

✓ Singing also boosts my mood and gives me a sense of happiness and energy

The verb 'boost' should be in the third person singular form 'boosts' to agree with the singular subject 'Singing'. Also, 'happiness in energy' is incorrect; it should be 'happiness and energy' to list two nouns properly.

× I've never learned how to sing properly

✓ I've never learnt how to sing properly

Both 'learned' and 'learnt' are past tense forms of 'learn'. 'Learnt' is more common in British English, which may be preferred here. However, this is not a strict error but a style choice. No correction needed unless regional preference is specified.

× I really love singing as a hobby and a feature

✓ I really love singing as a hobby and a passion

The word 'feature' is incorrectly used here. The intended meaning is likely 'passion' or 'interest'. 'Feature' does not fit the context of describing singing as a hobby.

× Even though I do not plan to perform in front of my audiences, I think learning to single be enjoyable

✓ Even though I do not plan to perform in front of my audience, I think learning to sing would be enjoyable

The word 'single' is a typo and should be 'sing'. 'Audiences' should be singular 'audience' when referring to a general group. Also, 'be enjoyable' needs a modal verb 'would' to express possibility.

× Anna help me express myself better

✓ It can help me express myself better

The sentence 'Anna help me express myself better' is unclear and likely a typo. It should be 'It can help me express myself better' to refer to singing lessons or learning singing.

× I really want to sing for him. My grandparents, because they live far away, I don't get to see them very often

✓ I really want to sing for my grandparents because they live far away and I don't get to see them very often

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect when referring to 'my grandparents' (plural). The sentence is fragmented and should be combined for clarity.

× Singing for them as a special way to show my respects and affection

✓ Singing for them is a special way to show my respect and affection

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' to be complete. Also, 'respects' should be singular 'respect' in this context.

× it helps me to feel closer to them despite the distance

✓ it helps me feel closer to them despite the distance

The phrase 'helps me to feel' is grammatically correct but can be simplified to 'helps me feel' for naturalness. This is a stylistic suggestion rather than an error.

× Absolutely yes after seeing a nursing home and I have noticed that both residents in a feel happier after performance

✓ Absolutely yes. After visiting a nursing home, I have noticed that the residents feel happier after a performance

The original sentence is fragmented and contains errors such as 'both residents in a feel'. It should be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Singing is it greatly series energy and you create a positive atmosphere

✓ Singing greatly energizes and creates a positive atmosphere

The phrase 'Singing is it greatly series energy' is incorrect and unclear. It should be corrected to 'Singing greatly energizes' to convey the intended meaning.

× which is why I believe it bring happiness in his smiles. 2 people

✓ which is why I believe it brings happiness and smiles to people

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'in his smiles. 2 people' is unclear and should be corrected to 'and smiles to people' for clarity.