唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating words like "really" and try to use a wider range of vocabulary. Also, adding a linking phrase would improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and unwind after a busy day, which reduces my stress effectively.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: No, I have never learned to sing systematically because my parents couldn't afford music lessons when I was young.

建議: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and slightly unclear. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, use more precise vocabulary to express your feelings.

範例: I would like to sing for my family, especially my parents and husband, because their support inspires me and makes me feel happy.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Avoid repeating phrases and try to express your ideas more clearly. Use linking words and specific reasons to support your opinion.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people reduce stress and maintain a positive attitude during difficult times.

× Maybe I have a I have never learned about have to sing systematically because when I was young, my parents are not reaching or not rich enough to support my music. How learning?

✓ Maybe I have never learned how to sing systematically because when I was young, my parents were not rich enough to support my music learning.

The original sentence contains incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'Have a I have never learned about have to sing' is incorrect; it should be 'have never learned how to sing'. Also, 'parents are not reaching' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'were not rich enough'. The phrase 'support my music. How learning?' is unclear and should be 'support my music learning'. This correction uses the past participle 'learned' correctly and adjusts verb tenses to past to match the time frame.

× my parents are not reaching or not rich enough to support my music.

✓ my parents were not rich enough to support my music.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was young'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Are' is present tense; it should be 'were'. Also, 'reaching' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'rich enough', so 'reaching' is removed.

× they have contributed to all of their efforts to my daily life, which makes me feel really happy and inspiring when I think about them.

✓ they have contributed all of their efforts to my daily life, which makes me feel really happy and inspired when I think about them.

The phrase 'contributed to all of their efforts' is incorrect; the verb 'contribute' takes a direct object without 'to' in this context. Also, 'inspiring' is an adjective meaning causing inspiration, but here the feeling is experienced by the speaker, so 'inspired' (past participle) is correct.

× which makes me feel really happy and inspiring when I think about them.

✓ which makes me feel really happy and inspired when I think about them.

The adjective 'inspiring' describes something that causes inspiration, but the speaker is describing their own feeling, so the correct adjective is 'inspired'.

× Yes, it is suggested that as it suggested, it is suggested that singing can help people reduce stress and become more relaxing and have a positive attitude toward the virus changes, changes.

✓ Yes, it is suggested that singing can help people reduce stress, become more relaxed, and have a positive attitude toward changes caused by the virus.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkwardly structured. 'As it suggested' is unnecessary and repeated. 'Become more relaxing' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'become more relaxed' (adjective). 'Have a positive attitude toward the virus changes, changes' is redundant and unclear; it should be 'have a positive attitude toward changes caused by the virus' for clarity.