唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Tapai ko uttar thulo sentence haru ma thulo bhayeko cha ra kehi sentence haru grammatical error pani cha. Tapai le answer lai thulo sentence ma bhanda chhoto ra spashta sentence ma bhannu parcha. English ma sentence haru lai logical linking words jastai 'because', 'so', 'therefore' prayog garera answer lai ramro banau. Tapai le 'Singing health helps me to relax' bhanda 'Singing helps me to relax and feel better' jasto bhannu saknu huncha.

範例: Yes, I like singing, but I usually sing alone because I don't think my voice is very good. Therefore, I feel more comfortable singing in private. Singing helps me to relax and reduce stress, even though I am not confident about my singing skills.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma thulo sentence haru cha ra kehi sentence haru confusing cha. Tapai le answer lai chhoto ra spashta sentence ma bhannu parcha. Linking words jastai 'because', 'so' prayog garera answer lai logical banaunu parcha. Tapai le 'I just go with the flow' jasto phrase ko thau ma 'I have never taken singing lessons' jasto spashta bhannu saknu huncha.

範例: No, I have never learnt how to sing because I am not confident about my voice. So, I prefer not to take singing lessons and focus on other interests instead.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma grammatical error cha ra sentence haru ramro sanga jodiyeko chaina. Tapai le answer lai chhoto ra spashta sentence ma bhannu parcha ra linking words jastai 'if', 'because' prayog garera answer lai logical banaunu parcha. Tapai le 'I would probably sing for my mother' bhanda 'If I had a chance, I would sing for my mother because she supports me' jasto bhannu saknu huncha.

範例: If I had a chance to sing for someone, I would choose my mother because she always supports me. However, I am afraid that others might make fun of me, so I usually avoid singing in front of people.

建議: Tapai ko answer ma grammatical error cha ra sentence haru ramro sanga jodiyeko chaina. Tapai le answer lai chhoto ra spashta sentence ma bhannu parcha ra linking words jastai 'because', 'so' prayog garera answer lai logical banaunu parcha. Tapai le 'it brings the Peace of Mind' bhanda 'singing brings peace of mind' jasto bhannu saknu huncha ra 'many people brings career out of it' bhanda 'many people even build their careers through singing' jasto bhannu parcha.

範例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness to people because it helps them relax and feel peaceful. Many people enjoy singing and even build their careers through it, so singing can definitely improve people's happiness.

× Because I don't think my voice is very good, I'm probably just a bathroom singer as I feel more comfortable singing in private rather than in front of others.

✓ I think my voice is not very good, so I'm probably just a bathroom singer because I feel more comfortable singing in private rather than in front of others.

The original sentence starts with 'Because' which creates a sentence fragment. To correct this, the sentence should be combined properly to form a complete sentence. Using 'so' and 'because' appropriately connects the ideas clearly.

× Singing health helps me to relax, even I'm not that confident about my singing skills.

✓ Singing healthily helps me to relax, even though I'm not that confident about my singing skills.

The phrase 'Singing health' is incorrect; it should be 'Singing healthily' to use the adverb form. Also, 'even I'm not' is incorrect; it should be 'even though I'm not' to properly connect the clauses.

× No, I haven't and I don't think I will ever learn how to sing.

✓ No, I haven't and I don't think I will ever learn how to sing.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I just go with the flow and because I know from my heart that I will not be better at this because of my voice and I'm really not confident singing in front of many people.

✓ I just go with the flow because I know from my heart that I will not get better at this because of my voice, and I'm really not confident singing in front of many people.

The original sentence has an unnecessary 'and' before 'because' which disrupts sentence flow. Removing 'and' and adding a comma before 'and I'm really not confident' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× So I like to distance myself and not to learn singing and probably I will focus on other things.

✓ So I like to distance myself from singing and probably I will focus on other things.

The phrase 'not to learn singing' is awkward and incorrect. It is better to say 'distance myself from singing'. Also, removing the second 'and' improves sentence flow.

× I really haven't. Think about it.

✓ I really haven't thought about it. Think about it.

The phrase 'I really haven't' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'thought about it' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× If I got a chance to seeing, I would probably sing for my mother.

✓ If I got a chance to sing, I would probably sing for my mother.

The phrase 'to seeing' is incorrect; after 'to' (a preposition), the base form of the verb should be used, so 'to sing' is correct.

× But other than that I don't know.

✓ But other than that, I don't know.

A comma is needed after 'that' to separate the clauses properly.

× I had other people will make fun of me so I don't think I will ever sing for anyone other than my mom.

✓ I think other people will make fun of me, so I don't think I will ever sing for anyone other than my mom.

The phrase 'I had other people will make fun of me' is incorrect. It should be 'I think other people will make fun of me' to express the intended meaning.

× Yes, it brings the Peace of Mind to people because I have seen many people enjoying singing an realizing that.

✓ Yes, it brings peace of mind to people because I have seen many people enjoying singing and realizing that.

'Peace of Mind' should not be capitalized and does not need 'the'. Also, 'an' is a typo and should be 'and'.

× And that is where they belong.

✓ And that is where they belong.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× It gives peace to them and many people brings.

✓ It gives peace to them, and many people make a career out of it.

The phrase 'many people brings' is incorrect and incomplete. It should be 'many people make a career out of it' to complete the thought properly.

× Career out of it, so I really think it will helping people hapiness.

✓ They make a career out of it, so I really think it will help people’s happiness.

'It will helping' is incorrect; modal verb 'will' should be followed by base verb 'help'. Also, 'hapiness' is misspelled and should be 'happiness'.