唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct sentences. For example, use present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Also, add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Actually, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not melodious. Moreover, singing feels like a daunting task for me.

建議: Use correct verb tenses and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, try to provide clearer supporting details with linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, during my school days, we had a music period when we went to the music lab to learn singing. However, I didn't find it very interesting because I felt my voice was not good.

建議: Try to use correct conditional forms and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and make your answer more natural.

範例: To be honest, I don't usually like singing, but if I get a chance, I would definitely sing for my mother because she is the best and has helped me a lot with my work. For these reasons, I want to sing for her in the future.

建議: Focus on sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words properly and provide clearer, more specific reasons to support your answer.

範例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people in many ways. For example, some people feel relaxed after singing, and for others, it is a hobby. Therefore, I believe singing can make many individuals happy.

× Uh, actually, I don't like singing because I think that my voice was not melodious.

✓ Uh, actually, I don't like singing because I think that my voice is not melodious.

The sentence talks about a current opinion about the voice, so the present tense 'is' should be used instead of the past tense 'was'. Using past tense here incorrectly suggests the voice was melodious only in the past.

× Moreover, it was a daunting task for me to sing a song.

✓ Moreover, it is a daunting task for me to sing a song.

Since the speaker is expressing a current feeling about singing, the present tense 'is' should be used instead of the past tense 'was' to correctly reflect the ongoing difficulty.

× Yes, during my school time there was a music period and in that period we go to the music lab and tended to learn music.

✓ Yes, during my school time there was a music period and in that period we went to the music lab and tended to learn music.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to maintain tense consistency. 'Tended to learn' is acceptable as it indicates habitual past action.

× But I didn't find it quite interesting because my voice was not very good.

✓ But I didn't find it quite interesting because my voice was not very good.

This sentence is already correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× To be honest with you I don't want to sing but if I will get a chance I will definitely sing for my mother becauses she's the best and she helped me a lot in my work and for this reasons I want to sing for my mother in the future.

✓ To be honest with you I don't want to sing but if I get a chance I will definitely sing for my mother because she's the best and she has helped me a lot in my work and for these reasons I want to sing for my mother in the future.

In conditional sentences about the future, the present simple 'get' is used instead of 'will get' in the 'if' clause. 'Becauses' is a spelling error and should be 'because'. 'Helped' should be present perfect 'has helped' to indicate an action continuing to the present. 'For this reasons' should be corrected to 'for these reasons' to match plural 'reasons'.

× Yes, singing and bring happiness to people in many ways alike why some people feel relax after singing and moreover sometimes it is a hobby of the people to sing.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people in many ways, like how some people feel relaxed after singing, and moreover, sometimes singing is a hobby for people.

The original sentence has structural issues and incorrect word forms. 'Singing and bring' should be 'singing can bring' to form a correct verb phrase. 'Alike why' is incorrect; 'like how' is appropriate. 'Feel relax' should be 'feel relaxed' (adjective). 'It is a hobby of the people to sing' is awkward; 'singing is a hobby for people' is clearer.

× So I think these are the reasons why are singing a song can bring happiness to many individuals.

✓ So I think these are the reasons why singing a song can bring happiness to many individuals.

The phrase 'why are singing a song' is incorrect word order. The correct order is 'why singing a song' without the auxiliary verb 'are' to form a proper noun clause.