唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'emotion', explain what you mean by it clearly.

範例: Yes, I love singing because it allows me to express my emotions and reflect on my feelings. Moreover, it is a relaxing activity that I enjoy during my leisure time, and I believe it is one of the best ways to unwind.

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'a great way to' without finishing the thought.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing in my third grade from my music teacher, who is very skilled. He taught me proper techniques and how to understand musical notes. We both find singing very relaxing, and it helps me improve my mood significantly.

建議: Your answer is heartfelt but contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use correct tenses and clearer expressions. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I want to sing for my mother because I believe she has sacrificed a lot to make my life better. Recently, I wrote a poem about her for a school competition and dedicated it to her. I think a mother is a person's greatest supporter in life.

建議: Your answer conveys the main idea but has repetition and grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words unnecessarily and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, be specific about how singing helps people.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it connects people emotionally. Moreover, it helps individuals escape from life's stress and is an effective way to stay happy and relaxed.

× Yes, I love singing because singing is not only an activity but it is an emotion, emotion 2 which connects me with my own feeling and alone mean to do self analysis.

✓ Yes, I love singing because singing is not only an activity but an emotion, which connects me with my own feelings and alone time means to do self-analysis.

The phrase 'emotion 2' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'an emotion'. 'Feeling' should be plural as 'feelings' to refer to multiple emotions. 'Alone mean to do self analysis' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'alone time means to do self-analysis' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Moreover, singing is good activity which can be performed in leisure time.

✓ Moreover, singing is a good activity which can be performed in leisure time.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'good activity'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner.

× Yes, in my third class I learned how to sing from my music teacher.

✓ Yes, in my third class I learnt how to sing from my music teacher.

In Indian English, 'learnt' is commonly used as the past tense of 'learn'. Using 'learnt' aligns better with the regional usage.

× He and I find that activity very relaxing as singing help me to improve my mood and it is a great way to.

✓ He and I find that activity very relaxing as singing helps me to improve my mood and it is a great way to do so.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. The sentence is incomplete and needs 'do so' to complete the thought.

× I want to sing for my mother because I believed that she has a sacrificed my life in order to make my life better.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because I believe that she has sacrificed her life in order to make my life better.

The verb 'believed' should be in present tense 'believe' to match the present context. 'Has a sacrificed' is incorrect; it should be 'has sacrificed'. Also, 'my life' after 'sacrificed' is incorrect; it should be 'her life'.

× Moreover, recently in my school competition, I wrote a poetry on her which I dedicated all to her and I believe that mother is her biggest supporter of life.

✓ Moreover, recently in my school competition, I wrote a poem about her which I dedicated entirely to her and I believe that my mother is my biggest supporter in life.

'A poetry' is incorrect; 'poetry' is uncountable, so 'a poem' is correct. 'On her' should be 'about her'. 'Dedicated all to her' is awkward; 'dedicated entirely to her' is better. 'Mother is her biggest supporter of life' is unclear; it should be 'my mother is my biggest supporter in life'.

× Yes, I believe that singing and bring happiness to people because it it is not just an activity but an emotion, emotion which connects people.

✓ Yes, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people because it is not just an activity but an emotion which connects people.

The phrase 'singing and bring' is incorrect; it should be 'singing can bring' to express ability. The repeated 'it it' is a typo and should be 'it'. The repeated 'emotion' is redundant and should be removed.

× Moreover, it is a way of escaping from stressor for life and singing is something which can be done to stay happy and relieved from stress.

✓ Moreover, it is a way of escaping from stress in life and singing is something which can be done to stay happy and relieved from stress.

The word 'stressor' is incorrect in this context; 'stress' is the correct noun. 'Escaping from stress in life' is the proper phrase.