唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์มากขึ้น รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อนและเพิ่มความเชื่อมโยงระหว่างประโยคเพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติและเข้าใจง่ายขึ้น

範例: Yes, I like singing because it is a powerful way to express my emotions. For example, when I feel sad or excited, singing helps me share those feelings with others effectively.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและลื่นไหลมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำซ้อน

範例: Yes, I have learned how to sing, but mostly by watching videos on YouTube because attending singing classes is quite expensive for me. Therefore, I find online resources more accessible.

建議: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ รวมถึงให้รายละเอียดที่เฉพาะเจาะจงและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของคำตอบ

範例: I would like to sing for my friends because they are my singing partners at karaoke. We usually enjoy singing exciting songs together, including rock and pop songs.

建議: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ประโยคให้ชัดเจนและมีความหมายตรงประเด็นมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมเพื่อสื่อสารความคิดได้อย่างมีประสิทธิภาพ

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. When I hear others sing, I can feel their joy and it makes me happy as well.

× Yes, I like singing because I think the singing is one kind of expression that I think is can related to human.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I think singing is a kind of expression that can be related to humans.

The phrase 'is can related' is incorrect; 'can be related' is the correct modal verb + passive form. Also, 'the singing' is unnecessary here; 'singing' as a gerund is sufficient. 'One kind of expression' should be 'a kind of expression' for correct article usage.

× I think you can't express my feeling like when I'm.

✓ I think you can't express my feelings like when I'm sad or excited.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used; it should be 'I' to express personal feelings. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'sad or excited' completes the thought. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context.

× Sad when I'm excited.

✓ When I'm sad or excited.

This fragment lacks a main verb and subject; it should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence.

× I think singing is some kind of the medium that is interesting.

✓ I think singing is some kind of medium that is interesting.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'medium' in this context; 'some kind of medium' is correct.

× Oh yes I have a I have ever learned about singing but it's just I learn from YouTube or from video because while singing listen cost is quite expensive for me so I think is not approachable for me.

✓ Oh yes, I have learned about singing, but I just learn from YouTube or videos because singing lessons are quite expensive for me, so I think they are not affordable for me.

The phrase 'I have ever learned' is incorrect; 'I have learned' is correct. 'Learn' should be in present tense here to indicate ongoing action. 'While singing listen cost' is incorrect; it should be 'singing lessons cost'. 'Is not approachable' is incorrect; 'not affordable' or 'not accessible' is better.

× So I think I learn but learn from YouTube.

✓ So I think I learn, but I learn from YouTube.

The sentence is repetitive and lacks clarity; adding a comma and repeating 'I learn' is redundant. It should be simplified to 'I learn from YouTube'.

× First of all, I would like to sing for my friends because she's like my partner when I'm singing in karaoke.

✓ First of all, I would like to sing for my friends because they are like my partners when I'm singing karaoke.

The pronoun 'she's' is incorrect when referring to 'friends' (plural); it should be 'they are' to match plural subject. Also, 'in karaoke' should be 'singing karaoke'.

× So we will sing exciting song or alternate heaps song including rock song.

✓ So we will sing exciting songs or alternate happy songs, including rock songs.

'Exciting song' should be plural 'exciting songs'. 'Alternate heaps song' is unclear; likely intended 'alternate happy songs'. 'Rock song' should be plural 'rock songs'.

× Yes, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people because I'm also the one who feel happy because someone seen for me to like.

✓ Yes, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people because I am also someone who feels happy when someone sings for me.

'I'm also the one who feel' should be 'I am also someone who feels' to match subject-verb agreement. 'Someone seen for me to like' is incorrect; it should be 'someone sings for me'.

× When does seeing I think that I know that emotion.

✓ When someone sings, I think I understand that emotion.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'When does seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'When someone sings'. 'I know that emotion' is better expressed as 'I understand that emotion'.

× What they would like to express for me is some kind of really cheerful things in my life.

✓ What they would like to express to me is some kind of really cheerful thing in my life.

'Express for me' should be 'express to me'. 'Things' should be singular 'thing' to match 'some kind of'. Also, 'really cheerful thing' is better than 'really cheerful things' in this context.