唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and somewhat unclear. Try to make your response more concise and clear by directly answering the question first, then adding specific supporting details. Also, avoid grammatical errors and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I love singing, especially classical music. Since childhood, I have enjoyed music classes at school, and my tutor encouraged me by teaching me how to sing in sync with the music.

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but is a bit confusing due to unclear phrasing. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid repetition and ensure correct grammar.

範例: Yes, I learnt to sing when I joined music classes for one year in grade 5. My tutor, who was skilled in playing the harmonium, taught us how to sing properly, and I really enjoyed learning from her.

建議: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Try to give a direct response to the question with clear and complete sentences. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details.

範例: I haven't thought about it before, but I would like to sing for one of the famous singers in my city who performs during the Neurot Re festival. It would be an honour to sing for them.

建議: Your answer shows your opinion but is unclear due to grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly with proper sentence structure and use linking words to connect your points logically.

範例: Yes, definitely. I believe singing brings joy and happiness to people because it is close to their hearts. Moreover, singing helps people express their feelings and follow their passion.

× Yes, I love singing, especially classical music which is very near to me because since childhood I had always been keen during music classes in my school time and all also because of my tutor.

✓ Yes, I love singing, especially classical music which is very close to me because since childhood I have always been keen during music classes in my school time and also because of my tutor.

The original sentence incorrectly used 'had always been keen' which is past perfect tense, but the context requires present perfect 'have always been keen' to indicate an action continuing from the past to the present.

× She encouraged me and taught me how to sync properly and it.

✓ She encouraged me and taught me how to sing properly.

The word 'sync' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. Also, 'and it' is unnecessary and unclear, so it is removed for clarity.

× I joined music classes for one year when I was in grade 5 with my friend in which at UTR used to teach me teach us how to sing properly and also play harmonium which was her speciality and I enjoyed singing and learning from her.

✓ I joined music classes for one year when I was in grade 5 with my friend, where at UTR she used to teach us how to sing properly and also play the harmonium, which was her speciality, and I enjoyed singing and learning from her.

The sentence had tense and structure issues. 'Used to teach me teach us' is corrected to 'she used to teach us'. Added commas and articles for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, I haven't thought about this in the past, but I would definitely like to sing a four.

✓ Well, I haven't thought about this in the past, but I would definitely like to sing for.

The word 'four' is a homophone error; the correct preposition is 'for' to indicate the recipient of singing.

× One of the famous. Music singers in my city who singer bar during neurot re festival in my city and I would love to sing for them.

✓ One of the famous music singers in my city who sings during the Neurot Re festival, and I would love to sing for them.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It is corrected to a complete sentence with proper verb agreement and punctuation.

× Yes, definitely. I believe that singing can bring joy and hapiness.

✓ Yes, definitely. I believe that singing can bring joy and happiness.

The word 'hapiness' is a spelling error; the correct spelling is 'happiness'.

× Especially when singing help is. People saying because they it, it is very close to their heart.

✓ Especially when singing helps people, because it is very close to their heart.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It is corrected to a coherent sentence with proper subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× Besides that it also comes their mind and. Also followed their passion at the same time.

✓ Besides that, it also comes to their mind and also follows their passion at the same time.

The original sentence has missing prepositions and incorrect verb forms. 'Comes their mind' is corrected to 'comes to their mind', and 'followed' is corrected to 'follows' to agree with the subject.