唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hạn chế lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn.

範例: I don't like singing because I am not confident with my voice. My vocal range is quite low, so I find it hard to sing many songs well. Therefore, I usually prefer to keep my singing to myself.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều phần không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh nói lắp. Thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ ý và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

範例: No, I have never taken any serious singing classes. Most people only take classes if they want to specialize in music, but I have not done that.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, giải thích rõ ràng hơn về lý do và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Thêm từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I am not really a singer, so I prefer to express my music through instruments like the piano. It is the best way for me to share my musical feelings.

建議: Câu trả lời có nội dung tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngắt quãng và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Đồng thời, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn.

範例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. It releases hormones like dopamine and oxytocin, which create feelings of belonging and closeness. Also, singing helps to relieve stress after hard work.

× In the past, I didn't really like to sing because I am not confident with my voice.

✓ In the past, I didn't really like to sing because I was not confident with my voice.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the context is about the past, 'am' should be changed to 'was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I can sing most songs that people do and I don't think us. Beautiful as they do, so I just wanna keep my voice to myself.

✓ I can sing most songs that people do, but I don't think I am as good as they are, so I just want to keep my voice to myself.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun usage and incomplete structure. 'Us' is incorrect here; it should be 'I am as good as they are' to compare properly. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'.

× Well, I have not taken any serious classes in singing. I just well, people usually just. Open the mouth dancing, you know, really, really take anything. Classes only if you want to specialize in music.

✓ Well, I have not taken any serious singing classes. People usually just open their mouths and sing; they don't really take classes unless they want to specialize in music.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. The correction restructures the sentences for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× As I am not quite other singer myself. I like to express my music through. Forms of instruments such as the piano because it's the only way I can express my music.

✓ As I am not quite a singer myself, I like to express my music through instruments such as the piano because it's the only way I can express my music.

The phrase 'not quite other singer' is incorrect; it should be 'not quite a singer'. Also, sentence fragments are combined for clarity.

× Yes I do singing releases happy. Hormones such as dopamine and oxytocin, which creates a sense of belonging and togetherness and colon closeness between people.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing releases happy hormones such as dopamine and oxytocin, which create a sense of belonging, togetherness, and closeness between people.

The original sentence has punctuation and preposition errors. 'Happy hormones' is one phrase, and 'creates' should be 'create' to agree with plural subject. Also, 'colon closeness' is likely a typo and corrected to 'closeness'.

× Also, singing helps to relieve stress after. A period of hard work.

✓ Also, singing helps to relieve stress after a period of hard work.

The sentence is fragmented; combining the two parts creates a complete and grammatically correct sentence.