唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is not very clear and contains irrelevant information about academics which does not relate to singing. Try to give a direct answer about your liking for singing and explain why you enjoy it with clear and relevant details. Avoid mixing unrelated topics and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. I often sing my favourite songs at home, which makes me feel happy and refreshed.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and confusing phrases like 'silent singing' and 'Mr. the Boxing'. Please try to give a clear and direct answer about whether you have taken singing lessons, mentioning your teacher properly and using correct grammar. Keep your answer simple and relevant.

範例: Yes, I have taken singing lessons from my favourite teacher, Mr. Singh, who now lives in America. He taught me many useful techniques to improve my voice.

建議: Your answer shows good intention but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'golden life mid to me'. Try to express your thoughts clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Keep your sentences concise and relevant.

範例: If I get a chance, I would love to sing for my mother because she has sacrificed a lot for me. Singing for her would be my way of showing gratitude and love.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'fear legs'. Try to use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary to express how singing helps people emotionally. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their feelings. Moreover, singing helps reduce stress and fear, making people feel more relaxed and joyful.

× I have keen interest in music and I also love to sing.

✓ I have a keen interest in music and I also love to sing.

The phrase 'keen interest' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it because 'interest' is a singular countable noun. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I stood over first positions in my academics because I have so much good Sir singing skills.

✓ I stood first in my academics because I have very good singing skills.

The phrase 'stood over first positions' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'stood first'. Also, 'so much good' is incorrect; 'very good' is appropriate to modify 'singing skills'. The word 'Sir' is unnecessary and misplaced here.

× Ah yes, silent singing from my one of the preferred trainer whose name is Mr. the Boxing.

✓ Ah yes, I learned silent singing from one of my preferred trainers whose name is Mr. The Boxing.

The original sentence lacks a verb and proper tense. 'Silent singing' is unclear without context, but assuming it means a style or method, the verb 'learned' in past tense is needed to indicate the action. Also, 'my one of the preferred trainer' is incorrect; it should be 'one of my preferred trainers'.

× And now nowadays he is residing in America.

✓ And now he is residing in America.

The phrase 'now nowadays' is redundant; 'now' or 'nowadays' alone is sufficient. Also, 'is residing' is acceptable but 'now' alone is enough to indicate the present time.

× If ever a good chance to sing for someone then I will sing for my mother because as she sacrifices all of the things for me and she give me a golden life mid to me so I will definitely sing for my mother.

✓ If I ever get a good chance to sing for someone, I will sing for my mother because she has sacrificed everything for me and given me a golden life, so I will definitely sing for her.

The original sentence has multiple structural errors: missing subject and verb in the conditional clause, incorrect verb forms ('give' should be 'given'), and awkward phrasing ('all of the things' should be 'everything'). The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× If ever a good chance to sing for someone then I will sing for my mother because as she sacrifices all of the things for me and she give me a golden life mid to me so I will definitely sing for my mother.

✓ If I ever get a good chance to sing for someone, I will sing for my mother because she has sacrificed everything for me and given me a golden life, so I will definitely sing for her.

The pronoun 'she' is correctly used, but the phrase 'sing for my mother' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, 'mid to me' is unclear and likely a mistake. The corrected sentence uses 'her' appropriately to avoid repetition and improve flow.

× she give me a golden life mid to me so I will definitely sing for my mother.

✓ she has given me a golden life, so I will definitely sing for my mother.

The verb 'give' should be in the present perfect tense 'has given' to indicate a completed action affecting the present. The phrase 'mid to me' is unclear and removed for clarity.

× I will definitely sing for my mother.

✓ I will definitely sing for my mother.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no change.

× I think so because with the help of singing they can easily express their emotions and they become more happy and they overcome stress and fear legs.

✓ I think so because with the help of singing, they can easily express their emotions, become happier, and overcome stress and fears.

The phrase 'more happy' is incorrect; the comparative form 'happier' should be used. Also, 'fear legs' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo; 'fears' is appropriate. Commas are added for clarity.